Love Ain't Suppose To Hurt . - Comments

  • trulyyours

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    I have writers block but I have a chapter typed up but its like something is missing.
    July 19th, 2012 at 11:40pm
  • tjenee26

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    My bad for da spelling!! Dis danm touchscreen smart phone...
    July 19th, 2012 at 09:50am
  • tjenee26

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    Now.....what happens next?? I wanna knw. I cnt wait into they make urban fiction a geren on hete..
    July 19th, 2012 at 09:48am
  • Katie Mosing

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    I didn't really understand this sentence in the first paragraph, "In you ask why do I deal with the shit because I love him. " I think you just messed something up.

    I didn't really like that you had two introduction chapters, and I didn't like the second chapter. I'd rather see you show these facts than just tell them to the reader. It would make for a stronger story. But, I think you have a good concept and I'd like to see you keep writing this and working on it!
    July 1st, 2012 at 03:13am