Morning Dreams - Comments

Wow. This is amazing! I love it!

I think this is great! It's so sad and frustrating. I do watch Sherlock, by the way, and I feel like this could very much possibly be what John is feeling. It's just brilliant.

Sorry this one took so long!

I love how simple the background is, it worked really well with the story. It took me a couple times reading it to fully understand what was going on. I loved this story though, it is very interesting but also I loved how every word you used had a reason. If that makes sense. This was great!

Oh. Wow. So much different than I expected. In a good way, mind you. I like how you kept repeating "there's this one dream where" and then explaining the different situations. If you couldn't tell, I absolutely love stories about dreams. So I liked this. I also enjoyed the second person point of view, which I normally loathe. It fit here for some reason and helped the flow and impact of it all. The end was unique and vague in an effective way. Very interesting piece. Fantastic job. (:

I'm running out of clever things to say in your story comments, you know. I can only do this so much longer without becoming totally irrelevant!

Your writing wears me out. I never have any idea what's going on until the end and then I'm like, wow, this is pretty fucking great, and then it's over. You write cool. You are awesome. You are the queen bee of the whole world because of this. I am honored to share the medium of writing with such an amazing author as you. ~~

I've never read nor watched Sherlock Holmes, so I can't really comment on much.
From what I've read it catches my interest, there's a sort of spark there, changing scenes quickly and introducing all of these feelings of monotony. It's quite good for an introduction of a story but for a one-shot there's alot of things left out. I'll be interested in reading more and subbing if it's a chaptered story!

Nicely written, good grammar, good spelling. n.n

Ditto. Mah Ivy can write. Nuff said. And how did I know it was a Sherlock... XD

Well, I don't watch Sherlock at all but I'm glad that this was able to be read without one having to watch the show. It was really lovely, I loved the way you wrote it and absolutely adored the repetition you have going. It's written exquisitely, and just, yes. Adore it. :]

Let me just say, that I watch Sherlock (though I've only gotten through the first three episodes), and I know of this little incident. I blame Tumblr for the spoilers. But this is just wonderful. You portray emotions so well, and I'm just sad right now. Stupid Sherlock. Gah~. You have a way with words. It's so physically emotional. It's moving and just ahgkjhajk;halh. It's so amazing. Ha, ha. I love how you describe it all, from your repetition to just the simplicity, yet complexity of words. It's contradictory, I know, but it was just amazing. <3

That was so beautiful, and so scary. Reading the repetition, it just aroused so much inside of me, and it honestly scared me. Like, it really hit something deep inside of me.

I wish I could say more to match your comment, but this was just so beautiful, so heart wrenching, that I don't know what to say. Which is odd, I'm usually never speechless.

This was... amazing.

This is amazing. Your writing is incredible. It was short but still awesome. It's probably one of the best things I've ever read on mibba.

This is impressive. I have absolutely no idea what's going on, but, goodness! I loved it!

Your writing was smooth, poetic. I could picture it completely in my head. Very great piece of art.

Wonderful job!

I just shat myself because I'm a total pansy but that is a good thing. That is a very, very, very good thing.

I'm so blown away by this right now. Like the others said, the simplicity of the layout really affected the story. It let me know that this was serious, this was pensive. This was no bull. You didn't pretty it up with cute colors or put a spooky picture or whatever to let us know that this was going to be a gruesome story. You left it blank, leaving the reader with no precursor whatsoever. And I think that made the punch at the end hit even harder.

The second person was perfect. You did it really well. You used it in a way that I've never seen it been used before. It made it feel ten times closer to home, so much more personal because it wasn't happening to she or he or I, it was happening to me. These were things that I saw myself. It really hit me right in my chest, I'm not going to lie. I felt something. It was really eerie. I felt like I really did see him fall, like I was falling right now.

Really, this whole thing scared the shit out of me. But I loved it.

I'm not sure what else to say about this. It was so genuinely flawless and stark. I'm subscribing just to keep it in my archives. This story...I can't even come up with a word. All I keep thinking is, What the hell did I just read?

God, I love you for this.

Okay, wow.
That was awesome and I want to read more.
Let me know when you update.

Wow! This is really great!

Like electric goat said, the words are all that are needed for the story to take flight. It doesn't need flashy colors or weird illustrations to make the story better.

Your anaphora (repetition of words or phrases at the beginning of the sentence, if you didn't know the technical term) is really great. It's generally overused or used in appropriately, but this is used to perfection and appropriately :D I'm definitely subscribing!

Wow. Wow, wow, wow, this is so impressive. First of all, the simplicity of the layout is great. I just absolutely love. It basically says, "This is just words; they are all that matter here." And I love that. Seriously. That was perfect for the story.

The way you started most paragraphs with the same sentence is a tool I think is too infrequently used in prose. This read like a poem and a dream and I was there because you put me there. Seriously, you are so talented. The emotion was real and I just adored it.

Great job!