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I love it! Write more soon please!

Thank so much. I'll fix it.

Your layout looks really cool, but I actually had to go to the default layout cause I could not read the writing. It would probably be helpful if you made it a bigger font. Also, it would help if the paragraphs were separated by a space (like you'll see in most Mibbian works) or you create an indent with your layout. Just a few things to think about.

As for the writing, I really like your description of what Miracle is doing and saying. You've made all of the movements she does very realistic and I actually find myself drawn to her character. While there are a lot of werewolf stories on Mibba, I like that you've put your own original twist on it by making her a rogue healer wolf. Most of Mibba's werewolf stories start with a human and a wolf. You've changed it up quite nicely.

If there was one thing I really think your writing could improve on, it would be your setting description. For instance, in the first chapter, you have her put an IV into one of the wolves. But until she did this I didn't even know there was an IV in the room. It would be helpful if you would take a paragraph to describe the setting before jumping straight into what the characters are doing. Also, be sure to use all the senses in your setting details - smell, sight, taste, touch, sound. They can all be used very effectively

Just a few suggestions. Keep up the good work and I'll go on to the next chapter