June 11th, 2013 at 06:15am
@ violet veins
Haha thank you for the constructive criticism. I agree with the layout and title. I will have to think of something to maybe make that better. As for the summary, it is a bit small. I either way over do them or say not enough in all of them. I am a descriptive writer so I am use to writing in chunks not little sentences. Thank you for the realistic opinion. The sex scene could have been better and I know what you mean exactly. If I am honest I could have done better. I was trying to fit that whole story into one little deadline and I was only a few words over so it wasn't accepted.
Okay, so I'm never really good at commenting on sex scene things because I find it so awkward but let's just say you did a really good job at it and I liked how the ending was so out of nowhere and I really wasn't expecting that to happen, while it was really sad it was still a very good ending to the story