Hate Me - Comments

Comment Swap:
The writing in this story is really, really good! While I don't know who the people in the story are in real life and can't comment on that, I can definitely say that I enjoy the concept of the story and it would even work with original fiction if you ever wanted to go that route.
I have to say that the near immediate invitation of someone you just met into your home was very strange, but for the story it works and I enjoyed every other bit of the meeting without pausing to think "wait, what?" But again, I understand that somethings have to be unrealistic to fit how a story needs to go.
Anyway, this is really good and, while I didn't read the whole thing, I will be coming back to read the rest at a later time! You've got a really good thing going here.

Comment Swap here!
I dislike the colors of the layout, it's very hard to read. But that's up to you, those of us who dislike it have a button up there to change it, right?
Anyways, about the story, I have no clue who those people are in "real life" but I like the idea. The way they met in chapter 1 was a little awkward, I mean, they just met and there's already invitations to go home and get warm. That is sort of weird.
But good job, anyways, I didn't see any errors, which is always a great thing considering we're on mibba :p

Comment Swap Here!
I'm not sure who Nick is in real life, but the story idea I really like. I like your knack for detail, it really adds to the story. For me a story needs depth and yours seems to really have that. I'm also a big fan of stories that have to do with drugs and that sort of stuff, because I can relate to them and they're raw and realistic! Good job!

Comment Swap Here!
I'm not sure who Nick is in real life, but the story idea I really like. I like your knack for detail, it really adds to the story. For me a story needs depth and yours seems to really have that. I'm also a big fan of stories that have to do with drugs and that sort of stuff, because I can relate to them and they're raw and realistic! Good job!

Hi hi hi! Comment swap.
I didn't want to read it at first because I'm so into Frerards that I can't get myself read anything else.
But I did read it all (I swear, alright? I really did read.) and I love Nick's personality. His seclusive behavior showing in the two first chapters and then all that amount of closeness in the third chapter like, ugh.

I'm very curious as to who is counting the story though? (or more like, is it a boy or a girl? Because I'd be very pleased if it was a gay story aha, erm.)

I noticed that you made the one counting the story tell Nick twice where was the bathroom? I'm sorry if that was intentional, just thought I would point it out.

And, are you still searching for a co author? I'd be really glad to work on this with you, gay or straight story.
This has potential (a lot of potential actually) and you're very talented in your writing and description of every feelings.

I just love it and subscribed because if I don't get to write with you, I really want to read more of it, then.

Okay so I was brought here by the comment swap, but I came back because I want to read more. I can't wait for you to write more so I can see what she decides to do; get to know him ;) or just kick him out. I have a feeling I know what she will do, but I'll just have to wait. Also, I really like the lyrics/ poem that was in the third chapter. Let me know where those came from, thanks :)

Your descriptions are so flippin' amazing. Keep up with the great work AND GIVE ME MORE! ;D

Another comment swapper here, and I'm liking this very much. The mystery of everything, especially the main character who is so far nameless unless I've missed something crucial, is oddly captivating. The only thing I might change is that you have the main character mention where the shower is twice, once in the second chapter and once in the third, which may or may not have been intentional. There's a good balance of dialogue and description, and your plot seems very solid.

Oh ya I want to read more cuz it's kinda addicting

I liked that last chapter...A LOT! I thought it was funny how he randomly asked her to sleep with him and she was shocked. What did she expect? Ahh you described him perfectly. Sound so attractive :)

Comment swap!
This was really good! What an intense first chapter. I love the mystery of the boy. The chapter maybe have been short but it was jam packed with awesomeness. ;) This guy's story just breaks my heart. I'm definitely going to subscribe.

Wow, this is pretty good. It's unbelievable how short the chapters are, yet they actually captivate you quicker than it can end. Although it is sad Nick left and started a bunch of drama, I love this, and I can't get enough of it.