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  • Crash Diamond00

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    Updateeeeee
    January 7th, 2014 at 11:23am
  • Chelsea's Dead Smile

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    @ Hail Agramon
    Honestly? I have no idea what I am going to do for this story. I left myself at a roadblock when I left it here to finish another story on a different website, and I can't seem to come up with a concept idea or even a filler chapter...which I don't believe in those anyway.
    October 23rd, 2013 at 09:05am
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    ): ??????? update ;~;
    August 6th, 2013 at 09:31pm
  • BittersweetRevenge

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    @ Chelsea's Dead Smile
    Its OK because we are all waiting patiently
    January 23rd, 2013 at 12:31pm
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    @ Scene_Queen_98
    I know it has but I barely have any time to write because of my work schedule, and I just want to not think when I get home after work. I'm terribly sorry :/
    January 23rd, 2013 at 05:14am
  • BittersweetRevenge

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    It has been far too long
    January 23rd, 2013 at 04:05am
  • NekoPower

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    :)
    November 6th, 2012 at 05:21am
  • VoicesInMyHead

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    This is so cool cant wait for the next chapter Mr. Green
    October 10th, 2012 at 01:43am
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    Woah...
    October 7th, 2012 at 05:35am
  • Chelsea's Dead Smile

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    @ Lovebites xo
    Thank you for giving it another try, and I can honestly tell you that LiveJournal is harder to navigate than Mibba so there's no possible way that I'd be able to plagiarize anyone even if I wanted to :S
    September 27th, 2012 at 01:46am
  • Lovebites xo

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    however i shall still give this another try cos shinigami in a vamp frerard sounds rather intriguing and i'm sorry for insinuating that you did i just thought the resemblance to another one i've read on a lj was uncanny
    September 26th, 2012 at 06:38pm
  • Lovebites xo

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    i didnt mean the frank dying of cancer thing at the beginning, ive only read a few chapters and it seemed very like a story i had already read.
    September 26th, 2012 at 06:35pm
  • SquiddyTheMouse

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    Love it <3 please update soon :)
    Hopefully no one pisses Frankie off too badly now :3
    September 26th, 2012 at 09:40am
  • BittersweetRevenge

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    I feel sawesome now! I think you just made my day a shit ton better XD i loved the chapter and now that everything has been fix and better i get it now thanks for the update

    - Scene_Queen_98
    September 26th, 2012 at 01:26am
  • Chelsea's Dead Smile

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    @ Lovebites xo

    The Spelling and Grammar in the first 11 chapters is the fault of not have a proper spell-checker. I just recently discovered that my laptop has Microsoft Word so I have been using that to my advantage and learning from it so I can put it into my future stories and chapters.

    The story idea wasn't plagiarized. As, in other Vampire Frerard's that I have read, I see the words Dominant and Submissive ("Fertile") and I don't see my character's in that light; even though Gerard is the first vampire in my story, Ray, Bob, and Mikey are at equal strength as he is.

    Where in a Frerard have you seen the Avenged guys as Shinigami? If anything I thought using them as Death God's was more unique than bologna on a sandwich!

    As I have explained to RayTorosArmy, I'm more used to writing in Third Person than First Person when it comes to a character's turn to think in a story, but it is still their thoughts and emotions that are portrayed.

    @ RayTorosArmy

    I've never actually realized that I've been doing that, and I've just been writing in Third Person on their views because I am used to doing things that way; I've never actually wrote in First Person throughout a story before so it's very hard. Just not used to saying "I" and "we" for when I write, and, when I do try, I tend to slip back into Third Person by mistake.
    September 25th, 2012 at 11:06pm
  • domebedward

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    This story is great, the plot is interesting. I haven't read anything like it. I love it! I can't wait for more.
    September 25th, 2012 at 06:36pm
  • Lovebites xo

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    sorry but this does seem like a good story but the whole idea so far sounds very much like another story i have read recently... if you haven't actually plagiarized the idea then sorry but your spelling is annoying me therefore i wont be reading anymore of it not to mention POV then write in third person..
    September 25th, 2012 at 05:27pm
  • RayTorosArmy

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    Why do you say Gerard's POV or Frank's POV and then write in 3rd person? Surely it should be 'I' and 'we' not 'Gerard' and 'Frank'? Not being mean, just asking~
    September 25th, 2012 at 04:53pm
  • Mcrtomboy

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    So thats why they bite him, huh... COOL! Love the new update, please update sooon! I want frerard and frikey, lol :D
    September 25th, 2012 at 03:11pm
  • Mcrtomboy

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    Yay you updated! I love this story! I was worried that you had given up on it. Anyways please update soon!!
    September 24th, 2012 at 05:19pm