Oh my god, this was perfect. I don't know whether I want to ask you to marry me or the story which now seeing it written out is entirely too creepy but that's how much I love this. I'm excited to see if the story with Lisa is revealed a little more and how Jack makes up for missing 'the biggest hint ever'. Just everything about this from Rachel to Rian being giggly while drunk and Zack being mean. It's fantastic.
Honestly though, Rachel is probably my favorite. This story is just perfect. I feel like you write in a way that Jack (& the rest of the guys) would think and do. I don't know, it's just realistic and I love that. So yeah, update soon!