The Choice - Comments

I loved it! It's such a unique way to portray the seasons and the characters you've created for Summer and Winter. If you dragged out her choice, I'll bet you could have created a tad more depth to your characters, but I don't think that was the point. This is so interesting and unique and I hope to read more from you in the future.
Here from Comment Swap, I loved your story of Autumn and Spring, and how they came to be.

My biggest problems were with dialogue and punctuation/grammar. I sometimes was distracted from the actual story and emotion by just little snags like that.

The story itself, however, was very entertaining. The plot arc was a nice one, and the layout makes it beautifully atmospheric. I enjoyed your hook and the ambiguity of the first few paragraphs a lot too!

Overall, well done.

Hello there, I'm here for the comment swap. So here's my review.

"His eyes were icy but deep as midnight."

This sentence does not work as a device for description. Not only does it confuses the reader (how is ice and midnight related? if you are going to contrast and compare you have to choose things that are related to each other in some way) If you must use "ice" and "midnight" try "his eyes were cold as ice and dark as midnight." NOTE: "and" not "but."

"Do you, Eve of Now-Ice, take me as my opposite, as my
mate, as my wife..."

This should be "Do you, Eve of Now-Ice, take me as YOUR opposite, YOUR mate, Your husband...?"

Other than that, I found absolutely nothing wrong with this story. If anything I found this story mesmerizing! The description, the language, even the story arc was so beautiful. You're an amazing writer. Keep it up. :)

Im here from comment swap!!. Man, What a story!! I loved that it was just one chapter rather than a drawn out long story, its bittersweet and short. I must say, it captured me from start to finish! The original story line and the basis of writing about the seasons and personifying them was brilliant! This is really good, and im really picky when it comes to enjoying stories so nice one!! XD

I really love your layout. It's very pretty, one of the better ones I've seen lately. It was very well written and I like your ideas so far! Keep up the good work! Nice job! I also love what you did with with seasons. Sorry I forgot to add that in the last comment.

Kristen :)

I really love your layout. It's very pretty, one of the better ones I've seen lately. It was very well written and I like your ideas so far! Keep up the good work! Nice job!

Kristen :)

I really love the layout and the picture. Its very simple and its not too distracting. I felt the story was beautiful. The concept of this story is fantastic. Your descriptions are amazing and I love your style. This was very well written. Keep up with the good work.

First off, I'd like to say I love your theme. It's pretty and simple and for me, when reading a story I really prefer reading stories with nice themes. So well done :)
The first line really dragged me in, and the entire story was beautiful and unique. I loved the idea of the 'Summer Man' and the choice that Eve had to make was amazing. This is an interesting look on how the seasons started, I enjoyed this story right from the beginning. Well done :)