September 24th, 2013 at 05:46am
Not on My Watch - Comments
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I really loved! I would like to read more about this relationship here, but you're writing any more of this aren't you? I'd love to have more chapters :3May 28th, 2013 at 11:56am
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ha ha - love the ending :)February 5th, 2013 at 03:43am
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Oh my God, I adore this so much. <3 Joey and Wensday <3 Loved it.October 31st, 2012 at 01:29am
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I can't belive I read this for the first time 8 months ago and I've never been able to move on from it. Seriously, this is like the best blowjob fanfic I've read EVER. If I ever stop writing my own fics it will be because of this one because it's too perfect and oh my god how did you even do thisOctober 31st, 2012 at 01:28am
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Oh my, haha.
I'm not really a big fan of slash, but this story has got me hooked. I could seriously feel the tension between them and that hook up was perfect. I thought the ending was shocking, and really hilarious. Good job on this c:
-Jess xxJune 14th, 2012 at 03:26am -
Oh my, the ending was awkward. But it was really really well written, and it caught you right in the beginning, and... I kind of loved it, okay?March 4th, 2012 at 07:28pm
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The layout: It's nice, a bit dark, but not too terrible. I think the banner picture should be changed, but only because it doesn't seem to go along well. I hope that makes sense.
The title: You shouldn't put (Murderdolls slash) in the title... It really should go in the short summary.
The story: It's pretty good. I didn't see anything wrong with the spelling and grammar, so... Yeah.
Overall, good job c:February 25th, 2012 at 07:17pm
First off, I find the background to be highly distracting.
A bit of Grammer Policing: you really shouldn't use single quotation marks unless you are writing Brit fiction... disreguard that. I just checked your profile.
It seams to be missing something I can't quite put a finger on. Further inspection leads me to believe that this work lacks depth of feeling. For example: How did the "stirring down below" feel. was it a hot swirling vortex or warm heat? How was Wednesday leaning against the wall? Languidly like a cat or pressed against the wood of the desk like a school boy trying to get in a smoke before the nonsignor catches him?