So Sorry, - Comments

:( I had thought I spaced them out? Well, let me know if anyone else is having issues with the paragraphs! I thought I fixed them up, but if they still need work, :) let me know how I can improve!

The layout: I like it, but I'm pretty sure you'd only be able to see the whole thing if your computer had a bigger screen. Like, for netbooks and stuff, your layout probably looks a bit different. But I do like the banner you used, so...
The title: I see this a lot... There really shouldn't be a comma in the title, especially at the end.
The story: The story is really good and I like what you're writing about. I didn't see any spelling or grammar mistakes. Like an earlier comment said, you really sohuld space out your paragraphs.
But that's pretty much it. Good job.

:) Okay okay, fixing, and not sure why when I move from Microsoft word it does that :(

I love the banners you use. :)
I kind of wish you would put spaces between paragraphs. As I recall, those are also mibba rules.
It seems pretty interesting so far, especially since she has a boyfriend. But it's too stressful for my eyes to read past the prologue because of the lack of spacing. :|

I love this! It's a trippy experiences reading this, and knowing that this is based in truth a bit, because I live in the Bay Area. I love reading stories that take place in my beloved San Fransisco, and to be able to place where the story is set (Van Ness, for example) <3

Wow, this is realy good. Keep it up... I'm subscribed<3