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  • Lon3lyangel

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    I guess me not liking May was with good reason. In the end she was a bitch after all. Glad it's over. ;)
    July 23rd, 2013 at 05:18pm
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    Long fight, but at least Cordelia is dead. I still don't like the fact of May getting to become a Noble. It's just...her. Anywho, please update again soon. Oh and there were a few errors.
    July 17th, 2013 at 03:14pm
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    :O
    June 17th, 2013 at 08:02pm
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    :O
    June 17th, 2013 at 08:02pm
  • Lon3lyangel

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    Very interesting but wishing Sandra should have lived.
    June 17th, 2013 at 06:40pm
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    Errors, but I don't know. I'm starting to dislike May even more now. She's so conflicted and very contradictory with her actions. She's not a hero and despite everything she's been through, I don't feel as though she's a strong character-or at least not as strong as the story is trying to make her as such. I understand she made her mistakes, but she doesn't seem to care about what's happened in her past or anything although she's telling the reporter/writer about it all. She's just kind of like, "Meh." to it all. Anyways, please update again soon!
    May 27th, 2013 at 01:55am
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    oh shit, a queen of the damned moment... hell yeah
    May 27th, 2013 at 01:43am
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    This is great. :)
    May 16th, 2013 at 05:28am
  • Lon3lyangel

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    I'm caught up, but I regret to inform you that there are a lot of errors in chapters 15-17. The story is great otherwise, though. Anyways, thanks for updating.
    August 25th, 2012 at 10:50pm
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    Quite a few errors in Chs. 12 and 13 so please be sure to revise them. Otherwise, those chapters were good.
    August 10th, 2012 at 02:51pm
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    Some of the errors are now fix.
    July 15th, 2012 at 06:41pm
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    Thank you I will be updating Chapter 12. But however I'm sorry for the grammatical errors in both chapters. The fight between May and Xavier okay. When they clashed against each other...May was holding her dead friend in her arms after taking his powers. The near end of the story takes the readers back to what happen between the fight of May and Xavier.
    July 15th, 2012 at 06:30pm
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    :( Unfortunately there were quite a few grammatical errors in both Chs 10 and 11, but I enjoyed the story all the same. I didn't fully understand the fight between May and her friend, but I sort of got it. Anyways, thanks for updating. Please update again soon.
    July 15th, 2012 at 06:13am
  • GoldHeart

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    Thank you. I need some one to subscribe as well. And I just post it on there not so long ago.
    May 30th, 2012 at 02:50am
  • Lon3lyangel

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    Just re-edit for corrections like grammar. Otherwise, the chapter is good. Please update soon!
    May 30th, 2012 at 01:46am
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    Just re-edit for corrections like grammar. Otherwise, the chapter is good. Please update soon!
    May 30th, 2012 at 01:46am
  • Lon3lyangel

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    Love the updates. Please update again soon! ^_^
    May 20th, 2012 at 01:07am
  • GoldHeart

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    Okay. I promise to do much better next time.
    May 11th, 2012 at 05:00pm
  • Lon3lyangel

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    I don't in any way, shape, or form mean to sound like an English teacher or if I'm bashing your story, but
    Actually, there are a lot of grammatical errors such as sentence fragments, incorrect tense usage of words and other errors, but overall, it's a good story. If I did decide to inbox you a corrected form of the chapters you have written so far, it would probably be around the end of the week in which you'd receive it. Anywho, please update soon. I'm subscribing to this story, btw.
    April 2nd, 2012 at 10:00pm
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