Beauty Queen - Comments

amazing. end of story.

I just found this and I loved it! I kinda wish it was a longer story:)

First off, thank you for entering my contest! This was a great entry. I liked that Nina was vulnerable, but had a tough streak in her. I also liked how you incorporated the lyrics subtly, like the beauty queen, the pouring rain. And I loved how you described a kiss--like that first drop of a roller coaster. Brilliant. The switching from her point of view to his was interesting, but at one point during Nina's POV when she was fighting with her mother, you did switch from first person to third person POV briefly. Not a big deal, it happens when you work with different POVs. And the ending was awesome. It made me smile big time. Again, fantastic entry and thank you for all your effort.

LOL the ending was awesome (;
This was really good :P