When I Think About You - Comments

really sad this is over, but at the same time, i can't be sad.

Yay they have a BABY! I loved this chapter, especially when Lil was theatening Zayn's manhood! Great job; I love this.

Yayayay the baby has been born! He sounds absolutely adorable omg. They're a nice happy family now omg. While I'm happy for that, the fact that the end is near is sad news. I'll try and think of the happy family and not the impending ending sigh.

ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh:') i'm so happy for lil and zayn even though they are fictional characters! yayyy <3

The baby is coming! I can't wait! I loved this chapter. Harry was absolutely hilarious during the prank on Nick! Niall was so unhelpful and I loved it! hoo hoo heeeeee

The breathing exercises were just... to much! haha. But the baby's on the way! ahhh! That's exciting! I can't wait for Zayn's reaction!

that prank was priceless! poor Hazza! him doing the breathing exercises was just too adorable!

and AHHHHHHHH!!!!! the baby is coming!!!!!!!!!! I'm so excited for you to update again! more soon please :)

Omg that prank was wonderful. Harry doing breathing exercises was basically my favorite thing in life.

But, more importantly, THE BABY IS COMING. I'M SO EXCITED FOR THE NEXT UPDATE BECAUSE THERE WILL BE THE CHILDBIRTH...HOPEFULLY.

Hahahaha, harry doing breathing exercises! I laughed so much at that ;)

I am so glad the Harry pregnancy prank made it in. ((: so glad. Hahaha.

Yaya I love the update yay

IM FREAKING OUT OMG LAYNE OR EUAN IS COMINGGGGGGGG.

twins. oh and zayn is a beautiful angel. that is all.

THAT GIF. That video caused me to shed so many tears I can't even begin.

Haha 'fan bear'. That's cute. I remember when Liam tweeted about the bear version of him and that was adorable.
But omg Lil has another secret. I'm dying to know what is is ugh. Don't leave us hanging for long please!

Is she hiding that she's having twins???

awwwwwwwwwwwh lil and lou moment i'm going to cry :')

I really Love that Lil and Lou are so close. And zayn is so sweet. He remembers. Even I didn't remember O.O hahaha :) keep it up love! Xx.

Ugh Lou/Lil sibling bonding scenes will always get me. I almost freaking teared up, especially when he said she'd always be his number one girl. And then after I got that emotional beating, the part with the charms got me even more. Sigh. I feel this nearing an end and it hurts.

alright don't hate me. i'm going to be completely honest with everything that i am about to tell you because i want to help you.

your writing is a bit immature. i don't mean in the concept of fifty shades of gray maturity, i mean that some of your characters act as if they are children but doing very adult things (ex. having sex, getting married). i understand that in the story that is how your character is, but some things don't match up all of the time (ex. serious moments seem sort of silly, like in this chapter they don't really discuss their fight but instead joke about it whilst having sex).

now, i do like your writing style a lot. i believe that you can become an amazing author. you are excellent at explaining your setting as well as characterization(ex. you've given louis and zayn traits that they may or may not have in real life and you've successfully woven them into the story without coming out and saying it. you also do this with your original characters too).

i think that you should start with writing some short original fictions first and then work your way up to novel size writings. after all, fanfiction done the correct way isn't really that much different from original fiction and you do a pretty good job with writing fanfics. i hope that you can take my advice into consideration as well as do your own self-evaluations to see how you would like to improve as an author.

okay now that all that super-analysis is over, MAKE UP SEX WOOOHOO! hahahah i loved when zayn said "dream of me." too cute:) and i'm afraid to read fifty shades of grey because my mom is reading it... ewh. anyway i can't wait until the next update!

Yes! Have a writing career! You make awesome characters, and you have awesome stories! Awesome chapter love! :) keep it up! Or go above the bar! :) xx.