I Fear Your Name Will Haunt Me Forever - Comments

Dear author, first of all let me tell you that I'm not into these kind of fan fiction so I'll judge this the same way as if it was an original fiction chaptered story. Your summary needs editing, you have to add more about what the story is about and you have to make it interesting so it will pull your readers in. Give actual titles to the chapters, don't just name the first two or four but all of them. At the start of the chapters you have written "part one" blah blah, you have to take that part out. You also need a prologue. I know that I may sound harsh but your story has potential and you can turn it to a gem if you try. Keep writing. :) ~Marian.

Dear author, first of all let me tell you that I'm not into these kind of fan fiction so I'll judge this the same way as if it was an original fiction chaptered story. Your summary needs editing, you have to add more about what the story is about and you have to make it interesting so it will pull your readers in. Give actual titles to the chapters, don't just name the first two or four but all of them. At the start of the chapters you have written "part one" blah blah, you have to take that part out. You also need a prologue. I know that I may sound harsh but your story has potential and you can turn it to a gem if you try. Keep writing. :) ~Marian.

You updated? And it's a Ellie/Sev day? *gives you a bear hug, slightly cutting off your airsupply* thank you! *realeses you again, grinning at you*

I'm glad she's relaxed again, she needed some relaxation. Well she needs that and some Oliver loving.. Maybe she should go to the wedding, but bring Oliver or one of the girls with her for support? No matter what I think she's going.. It could be good as closure maybe? Seing it finalised..

I think Sev is in a way better mood now.. And that can always be helpful for others as well xD I loved the part with them and filch... Hehe.. Team work for the win!

Good chapter and I can't wait for more! Oh and yes! Someone else commented! I don't look as stalkerish/obsessed as before! Thank you Recklessly Brave!

I love this - I actually stayed up until about 2 reading this and then I realized I had to be up for 8.

Fred manned up!!! Now George and Oliver need to do the same!!! I'm loving the cuteness between Oli and Ellie - I'm eating up their adorableness!!! You've gotta update soon!!! To say I'm inpatient would be an TEEEEEENNNNNNNSSSSSSSSIIIIIIIIIEEEEEE bit of an understatement *heh*

Patient? Yeah.. I didn't plan anything against that statement *shifts slightly and throws out mysterious papers and drawings* I would never.. do.. that.. [insert short nervous chuckle] never!

Anyways, I hope you had a good holiday! Busy you say? Oh well, life happens. I just hope it wasn't bad stuff taking up all your time. Oh well ^^

So they won the game, Fred manned up! Wuhu! I wonder who stopped her in the halls. Teacher or student.. Hmmm... Oh and I can see I'm still the only one commenting... That is kind of disappointing.. But then again, I fail most of the time when I try to be a silent reader so yeah.. Didn't know commenting could be slightly addicting... Did you? x) hmm.. Good chapter.

Hehe, I'm your one woman commenter group on this story! So far at least. I think I'll have a one woman mini dance party the day someone else comments on this as well... But until then I can just love the fact that I'm getting chapters dedicated to me and have my name plastered all over your story comment page. ^.^
Anyways, so her and Oliver are getting really close. I wonder how the game will go and if they will win with her tactics and all.. And of so, how Oliver will react to it.. Hmm... I wonder just how much charming those girls can be xD
Still a really good story, I hope there will be a chapter more before your vacation. But if not, then that's okay too. Good chapter. :3

I actually checked out my own stories after your whole 'I have ten subscribers' thing and was surprised to find out that people were actually reading my story as well.. I thought there were like three.. because they commented and then I was like wow.. so I can kind of thank you for making me realise that.. Thank you

Anyways, so the others think that oli and her are getting it on.. when really oli is just making olies.. yeah I know that joke suck xD So the second Harry Potter books drama is kicking in. I wonder what that will mean for the group or what it will mean in your version of it. You are the author and I'm looking forward to seeing just what you will do

UH! And thank you for the dedication! You are too sweet! hmm.. I think that was all I had to say for now.. Good chapter.

Since you have hit ten subscribers, I have decided to celebrate it with recommending it! Maybe that will give you some more outspoken readers! But don't count on it! xD

Anyways, so Oliver admits his feelings for her? I wonder what the twins will do about it, I'd the feelings are returned and a some other things going down the same line if thought.

I actually thought it was the same chapter as the one before on the begging of this. It was quite a lot of it in the beginning. But never mind. I didn't really have a point for mentioning that xD

Another good chapter

Am I not enough for you? *fakes exaggerated hurtful look* I guess I understand xD Anyways, as your (so far) only commenter, I see as my duty to tell you... [drumroll] ...that it was a good chapter. A typo maybe two, but other than that nothing bad to say about it. I wonder how her and sev are doing, they need some quality time together besides her begging for permission. I also wonder what the newest member is likens what she is about to say.. Hmm... Also had something else in mind, but I can't remember it right now. Good chapter.

Hehe, Ellie and Oliver are too cute! And I'm all like "come on already" about them, already xD There is a lot of romantic come on's going on in my head about that group. But all in due time. I'm wondering what you heave planned next for this. I just really never know. I just hope she'll spend some time with severus soon. It seems like he misses her and as far as I can remember she hasn't yet. Good chapter.

Okay, ready for a long comment? I don't know why I wrote that, you're going to get no matter what xD

So I like the writing style of this so far and the continuing humor in it. If I remember correctly there was a typo or two somewhere. But nothing destracting or big, because then I would have remembered. I also like the characters so far and how they interact with one another. It's realistic in this universe and that's a big plus. Hmm.... Oh yeah! I like the feel of the story so far. It's pretty easy to get a feeling with the story so far and I think that's it forth is segment.

I wonder how the hell two players out played the entire slytherine team. They must be insanely good players. I also wonder just how much they wounded their slytherine pride. Maybe they just "forget" about it happening and live on like nothing happened. But then again, what is a victory without a little gloating? Another good chapter and I'm looking forward to more.

I'm kind of hoping that George wakes up first and takes pictures of the two sleeping couples. Blackmail is always funny xD other than that, it was another funny chapter. The interaction between all the characters is so natural and believable. I love it. Hmm... Think that was it. Another good chapter and I'm looking forward to even more.

Haha! omg! When Dombeldore (don't know if I spelled that right xD) joined in... love. You. For this chapter. It's hilarious and I can't wait for part two of this. Great chapter and I can't wait for even more.

Damn... Must suck to be her or Oliver right about now. Unless they can get back at the others somehow of avoid telling exactly what happened or say in a way, so they only get minimal information. Idk. But I don't think this truth or dare thing is a good idea. Everything happens in its own time or something like that. Good chapter and I'm looking forward to even more :3

No comments? Wow... Did not see that one coming... Seriously... Anyways, I really like this story so far. It has an interesting backstory and plot line/events so far. Plus the chracters are believable and have a good interaction with each other. So I'm subscribing in a second in hopes of more soon