Lessons in Love and Life - Comments

well unlike the other person who commented i liked it...i thought it was sweet and it was very close to what really happens...when bed things happen they all happen at once...i know because ive gone thought lots of bad things in my life but it could have used a little more details but i liked it it was good so keep up the good work XD

This is for comment swap:

The layout was very destracting. It had way too much going on and I honestly didn't like it one bit. I suggest finding a simpler but elegant layout that would fit well.

As for the one shot, it was good but didn't seem to flow. Everything was such a rush it tended to get boring in some areas and very hectic in others. As a one-shot, it made sense, but breaking them up ino parts such as 1-5 chapters would be better. Aka a short story