It's a little bit confusing as to who's actually talking because most of the dialog was in the same sentence as other people talking, but other than that it's fine :)
Sorry I didn't comment sooner but my exs have been mental. I was the complete same with the new mibba, I used to hate it but now I kinda like it, it's weird but also kind of easier to navigate. As for the story and the A/N I think you are still doing really well with it, I love the plot twist but I still kind of think that ray should get with her. If you feel uncomfortable then ultimately it is your choice but you could also just not write them any sex scenes and leave them to Frerard.
i like this, its different. i really like how all the doms respect Gina even if she claims to be human and how awesome sister she is. cant wait for more!!