I really enjoyed reading this. I like how you made Ryan and Jake's personalities different and stayed away from the 'so much in common' cliche that a lot of stories have. Also, I like that you made Jake hesitant and unsure, but he went along anyway- nice character trait. Bonus points for having a lovely layout and a character section too, I always love to see that in a story. Good job =]
March 31st, 2012 at 08:02pm