The story is really cute! I've only watched A Very Potter Musical/Sequel, but reading this makes me want to watch a lot more of their stuff. One of the main things I would work on here is actually explaining how the characters look. It's always nice to have an idea of what the writer wants you to be seeing, i.e, hair color, eye color, height (not necessarily in units, but in comparison to other characters) stuff like that. I had to Google all of the Starkid Production members that you mentioned just to get a vague idea of what they looked like, and as you can imagine, that got a bit tedious. So anyway, that's just my two cents. OH! Also, came here through comment swap. But overall, good job!
July 3rd, 2012 at 06:26am
