The Way I Feel - Comments

do write more, I'll be sad if you don't. for a first story this is some awesome stuff :)

♥ ♥ :) <3 xoxo

I really like your story and I was excited to see it updated; the only thing about it that I would suggest improvement on is the pacing and the mechanics. By mechanics I mean that you are putting commas where they don't belong and it's making your story read in a choppy way. Don't worry though, I've been writing for years and still occasionally have comma trouble. If you look over the rules and practice though you will get better at it. For a first story, this is really great. I will definitely keep reading! If you want you can send me a message on here. I honestly wouldn't mind helping you out with editing or giving you more feedback!

... Okay. That "Let Me Love You" gif looks like something from Supernatural LOL. Don't know why, I can just see Sam running towards Dean like that..
ANYWAYS.
About the story.
It's very interesting.
The only thing I really have a problem with, don't take this the wrong way, it seems a little too..rushed, I suppose. All the time jumps and stuff kind of make it seemed rush, maybe dig a little deeper into their thoughts, put more detail into it instead of time lapsing all the time. Y'know?
I really hope that didn't bother you, I was just giving you some friendly advice (:
I do like the story and I am looking forward to see what you have planned.
Update soon?

Much love,
-Sapphire Sky
xoxo

:O POOR MAXIE! Oh how I would have adored being that boy's pillow as the tears of sadness fell down that beautiful face. As for Ronnie appearing on the doorway at the end...WHAT SHALL HAPPEN NEXT?! Super excited to find out!

NICE!
I've been waiting on an update for this story for the longest time.
Can't wait to see what you've got comin' up!

what happened to chapter 6?

The chapter cut off on me after Ronnie screamed no. Was it supposed to?

This story is great and off to a good start cant wait for what happens next.

This story is great and off to a good start cant wait for what happens next.

You updated! *dances*
ooh, Maxie's there :D
Need next chapter. Like NAO. :3

Why did I not see this before? O.o
It's really good, you should update. ^_^

Realised way too late this was gonna be a slash (ok i had an idea) but I'll keep reading for now, i like your writing I'm just not into slash stories =)

the drug in me is you :3 im a smartical partical i want a cookie :P ok I LOVE IT need more

moarrrrrr. :P please?

This is really good. Good job especially because it's your fist story on here

Alright I'll put another...4 chapters....Sound good...GOOD :D

Alright I'll put another...4 chapters....Sound good...GOOD :D

moremoremoremoremore. :) please? i posted more on my jacky story.

Looks interesting I'd like to see where it leads.