Rachel Taylor Series - Comments

This is an interesting story and it has potential but its really confusing. You're writing is good, but you need to develop the plot a bit more.

I like how creative the story is! It's just a little confusing because it's jumpy. Maybe if you put in more details about everything it'd be really good. I think that if you took everything you said and expanded in it, you'd have quite a lot to go off of. Explaining the plane crash more. Describing the area the main character's in. And giving more of a picture to her friend's personality. All these things could give your story a lot of depth!

Yo this story is so awesome im batzz