Cracked Dreams - Comments

Ok... So I just left a comment on the sequel but I should really leave one here too. I absolutely enjoyed this story. You're writing is very engaging and I love your choice of words. The concept is great too. Obsession and whatnot. Lovely.
I quite like how real it is with how zack can flip on Lily when he feels threatened. I mean, you see it in those lifetime movies all the time. Guy is obsessed with girl, makes a move, kidnaps her and then is sweet and caring but deep down is totally insecure about her ever loving him back. I really enjoyed the way you showed both sides of zack.
He could be so nauseating with the constant I love you's and everything but it all goes back to that same insecurity. He keeps having to vocalize it because I think deep down he knew he was doing her an injustice.
Plus, I love how you threw in Matt having a crush on her and wanting to save her and be a hero.
I just don't think she's going to ever go running to Matt. As much as zack traumatized her, a part of her loves that softer gentle of him.
All in all I love this story and I hope you stick to it with the updates for the sequel.

REALLY. WOW. LOVED IT. SEQUEL!!

I loveeee your story! I am so excited about the sequel. Even if they relationship is really messed up, they ended up falling in love and deserve to be together. I hope Zacky gets his shit together and fix all his issues so they can have a healthy relationship. As for Matt, well... I don't know I hope he finds someone and it doesn't end up in a love triangle.

I really really hope you start the sequel soon.

Yes! So excited for the sequel! :D this story was captivating and I'm always so happy when you update! I was wondering, though, for the sequel. Did you have any plans on giving one of the other guys a girl? If you could make her a back story to fit the story?

Sequel, sequel, sequel. **squeeling, jumping up and down**

SEQUEL!!!!!!!! this is too good not to have a sequel...so SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Still love this story! I think a sequel would be great!

I would love a sequel!! I think it is really cute how Zacky is trying to be a better person. I'm obsessed with this story
-Ema

i would totally be interested in a sequel. I hope this story does indeed have a happy ending, I don't want Lily to get hurt & for Zacky to turn back into an asshole. Matt, eh, I don't know, I think Lily is far too confused over her feelings for Zacky to even begin to remotely comprehend anything with Matt & his true feelings towards her. Love this story, great chapter. More please! :)

I wish that Lily would have feelings for Matt and not for Zack even thogugh she is denying those feelings that she does have for him. It was cute that Matt was telling her that Jimmy has a crush on her when it really is him. I felt bad for Matt when he is helping her and she asks about Zack. Great update and I can not wat to read more when you update again.

love it!!! Please update very soon!!! I love this story!!

As much as I want to be mad at Zacky for what he did to her, I can't find it in my heart. I can see why Liliana is hesitant, and maybe even resistant to trusting Zacky again. I would be too! I'd love to see Matt step in and help Liliana out. She seems like she could use some care. Love this, and hope that you find your inspiration again!

I am so pissed at Zack. He is such a douche bag I don't think Liliana would ever love him. He has so many problems and D;< This story made me cry and then I was so mad I nearly threw my phone across my living room. So good job. I hope you finish this and update soon:]

Damn Zacky you got more emotion changes than a bi-polarite! First you're sadistic and mad, and then you're all cute and make me want to put you in my bed! This is so good so far- and I just found it, so I'm super excited to read the rest!

I love this story. Just found it and read it all today. I really like your writing style and I love the plot of the story. I do not read many Zacky stories, but this one intrigued me. I can not wait to read more so I hope that you can update very soon.

Loved it!!! And missed this story!!!

yay your back!!!

I've read the first few Chapters and I'm really confused which just makes me more interested and determined in reading the whole thing, your really good and I liked reading this! Carry on the good work!

First of all, I would like to say that I liked the layout. It wasn't too flashy and didn't drag my attention away from the story itself, which I really enjoyed.
The summary, though.. I mean, don't get me wrong, it's good, but I think you need more of an attention getter. Maybe a little slab from the story? It doesn't have to be full of action, but maybe a little insight..?
The story itself I think you did a wonderful job. You didn't overdo or underdo detail like some people do, and there were few spelling grammar errors.
An error I did notice, though.
“You’re father, he’s not good. You know that too, right? That’s why I’ve tried to keep him away from you.”.
You're should be Your.

This is a nice story with an interesting plot.

The only suggestion I would have is to be careful not to fall into the trap of using the same sentence starters over and over. I've notice a lot of sentences beginning with I. I slid, I left, I heard, I thought, etc. Try to switch it up a bit to make this more interesting and not seem as if you're (I'm) reading the same thing over and over.