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  • taylorgaskarth

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    This is really good keep writing please Very Happy
    August 6th, 2012 at 07:21pm
  • koobyloob

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    I was interested immediately by the layout, Alex and Jack as the subjects, and the summary but as soon as I hit chapter one, I wasn't anymore.

    Try using paragraphs to even out the story and to make it easier for the reader to read. Try writing in Microsoft word as it will help with small spelling and grammatical errors.

    Good luck in the future :)
    June 8th, 2012 at 08:35am
  • heart-of-rock

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    Love love love this!!! Keep updating :))
    May 19th, 2012 at 05:01am
  • emilynsnatl

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    OMFG GABE! I love this story.. like it's one of my favorites of all time! Please Update soon :)
    May 17th, 2012 at 11:46pm
  • danicafae

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    Didn't see Saporta coming! Anyway, i love this story, please continue to update it? :)
    May 17th, 2012 at 10:19pm
  • hungrytales

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    Love it! Can't wait for the next update
    May 17th, 2012 at 07:49pm
  • emilynsnatl

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    I LOVE THIS STORY SOOOOO MUCH! UPDATE ASAP!
    April 21st, 2012 at 06:42pm
  • hungrytales

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    UPDATE GOD DAMNIT!!

    No, seriously, I wanna know what happens next, love this story :)
    March 25th, 2012 at 06:12pm
  • itsjojo

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    MY FAV STORY YET!
    WHERE ARE THE OTHER CHAPTERS.... IM WAITING >.>
    March 23rd, 2012 at 08:49pm
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