I like that this wasn't your typical Avenged Sevenfold fic, I also have to say that the beginning drew me in immediately, mostly out of being able to relate to the character Olivia. It actually felt almost strange, ha. Olivia is part of my name, though the spelling is different and I bartend. So that was pretty cool. ha. I also like how in the second chapter, your writing style changed and became a bit more "mature", the third and after were a bit hard for me to follow, but that's more my fault than yours (it's been a long night. Slightly inebriated. hah.) Buuuttt, all-in-all, I think you've got something going with this. :) Always a pleasure to find someone unique<3 Stay true. xo
@ synthian. I thank you so much for the comment, but as soon as I finish reading fifty shades, I will start working on my stories more often. I have been so caught up lately, but I definitely have a few ideas up my sleeve :D So I will update as soon as I can. And thank you :D
I am sad to know that it is not going to be updated much. I love the idea from the get go. It's something absolutely different and worthwhile to read about and it isn't too badly written either. Both of those qualities in one story is a rare thing to find on here. Give yourself a pat on the shoulder for that!
I could see that your story flows nicely, and there is something about Olivia that I want to know more about, like little bits about her life.
I am a little sad that you cut off from right there on Chapter 6. I would love it if you have picked up the inspiration and resolve to continue this story.
Just wondering, have you planned or have any ideas for the plot or what will happen in the future in this story? This might help you bring up ideas and guidelines to help you along with writing out the story.
just found this and i'm totally hooked :D woaah she flipped the hourglass and now Matt is in her bedroom?? Ohhhhhhhhhh to come home to him naked in your bedroom... i'd die in a puddle of drool... lmao!!
I really like it so far. I haven't read a story like this before and that is what makes it unique. I can't wait to read more and find out what happens with Olivia and that naked, muscular man in her bedroom. I hope you guys update very very soon!