Catching the Waves - Comments

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Very nice start. I already like your character and I hope she finds what she is looking for. You have nice descriptive language. I was happy to see your character cleaned up her trash. Looking forward to your next chapter.

Oh, and stay away from that Popeye's. Go organic.

First off, I've subscribed because this was so good.
Let's start off with layout and format: The layout was not at all overpowering and only helped me read the content easier, so you get some brownie points with that. (:
The story its self has a lot of potential. I like the fact that you're building it up instead of explaining everything in one chapter. You're introducing your character slowly and I like that!
Overall, I think this was very, very good, and I'd like to keep reading!

Hey, I think this story has great potential, honestly I'm already wanting to read more, I'll subscribe so I can keep reading! I hope you keep up the good work, it's a good skill when you can pull someone into wanting to read more! Well done!

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I love this! Your writing style is so beautiful, almost poetic particularly in the summary. Everything was quite realistic and I could really feel what was going on. You've written enough detail to keep me interested...and wanting so much more. I would really like to know what happened to cause her to leave so suddenly.

Your layout was also beautiful and suited the story quite well. I don't know that much about your characters, even Lillian, and I'd like to see more depth to them throughout the story. I wish there were more chapters posted!

There was one sentence I thought could be improved...

(in prologue)
Snow floated above her head in cotton ball sized flakes, sticking to her hair and simultaneous melting and freezing to it. - I think 'simultaneous' should be 'simultaneously'.

I wish I could leave a longer comment but that's really all I have to say. Your story is beautiful so far and I hope to see more. I'm definitely subscribing!

That was hauntingly beautiful at the start. So descriptive and amazing. I really liked the contrast between the cold snow and the warm beach, and how she didn't belong in the cold. Everything on the page just worked. You did really well. Good job, and I am not just saying that - I actually mean it! :)

I love this chapter. It was detailed and still gave a nice cliffy at the end to make me want more. I do hope you update soon so I can read more and give you a more thorough comment.

So far, it's hard to say too much about anything other than how nicely you write this story. It's very realistic and believable.

This story is beautiful so far! I love how detailed you get into the prologue, yet you don't give too much away. You set it up nicely for the beginning of the story.

I am going to end this comment short so I can read the first official chapter! I wonder what he is doing to her to make her detest the town so much! Intense, bro :D

Woww! So I got this story from comment swapper and I was really, really impressed. You use great descriptors to crate imagery in your readers’ heads and you spelling and grammar are spectacular. Keep up the good work because you have talent and I can’t wait for your next update, I just subscribed (:

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i really like the layout, and i loved the prologue. absolutely beautiful. i could envision the girl standing in the snow and everything. and i also loved the innocence of it. great story.

I really actually enjoyed the two chapters you have posted up. The prologue was absolutely stunning--it holds that childish innocence in the palms of its hands, and it really sets a tone for the story. I love how your write--it's simple but it's heart breaking. You can feel how disconnected she is with everyone. I also love that she threw her cell phone away at the end; to me it almost signified that she truly is leaving everything of her old life behind.

I love the layout! It's really quite pretty and itfits the story nicely. I liked the summary too. It made me want to read the story, and you gave enough info without making it long or giving away the whole story. The prologue was beautiful. It was almost poetic and I even felt the chills from the snow. As your story progressed it also improved. The first chapter was also great and I wish you luck with the rest! Keep up the good work(:

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I must say, the prologue was beautiful. I can not tell you how much it took my breath away. I felt my feet chilled and cold to the bone after your beautiful description. Well done, I am completely subscribing to this.

First I gotta say
I love your layout
It reminded me of a beach house :D

Now with your prologue
I quite enjoyed reading it
The way you described everything was very nice
Your prologue I thought was a perfect length

I can't wait to see more
Keep up the good work

<3

I like the banner. Very, very much. Do you use gimp to edit it, or some other photo-editing program?
I'm off topic lolol
The description on this is fantastic. I just cannot even... I'm pretty sure the scene isn't as pretty as that in real life, but you make it very beautiful. I love how people start off their stories with a nature scenery; it always makes me appreciate words. Your writing is just... fragile. IN A GOOD WAY. Your prologue gives the perfect amount of dialogue. It gives enough sentences to introduce the girl and to enough words to make me read more. I enjoyed reading this, love (( :

I love the layout! :)
I like the way you described the girl, but left a lot of to the imagination of the reader. I'll be really interested in seeing where this goes!

First thing: I really like the layout for this. It's a neat little contradiction to the first chapter, since it takes place in the winter. AND speaking of winter, I felt cold just reading about the snow! You are a phenomenal writer and I'm eager to read more!

Goodness gracious. This is like reading a book. Everything seems so perfect, so well-described and put together. And that's just what I got from the prologue. Honestly, this story is going somewhere and I can see it being great. You're doing a great job so far.

Your summary was good too. It kinda sucks a reader in.

But, when two figures from her past unexpectedly emerge outside her great uncle's beach shop, all she'd hoped to leave behind will come rushing back.

You have no idea how much that line made me want to keep reading. I'm just so eager to find out who the two figures are, assuming you meant people.

Honestly, just keep doing what you're doing. This is great!

The layout is very well done, and it fits the story and the banner well. The banner itself is awesome, I love how it has just a touch of an old look to it, as well as the words.

The summary really caught my attention. At first I was weary about the plot, but you write so well, and the way you described everything just really drew me in.

The prologue is beautiful. The words you used to describe the scene, and the way you described the girl; I could picture the entire thing in my head as it happened. And the very end of it leaves me wondering what happened and wanting to know more about the girl, the boy, the town, everything. You're writing is very visually simulating. I like how you don't miss out on the small details either, like here for instance, "Her flushed toes drew patterns in the frost." Describing how her toes are flushed, adds to the visual, and most people would miss small details like that.

You're a wonderful author and I'm going to subscribe.

This is a great beginning! You gave beautiful detail without giving away too much of the story. I am so curious as to what this idiot did to the girl XD So subbing and I will wait impatiently for the next chapter!

i love this so much. the layout is really good and fits the story well.