Faerie Lies - Comments

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I'm loving this! It's so unique!

I really like the idea behind this story and everything seems very well planned out. I really enjoyed reading this and can't wait for another chapter =)

I really enjoy reading this :] It's quite interesting. You should keep writing for it

I like the concept but I think some of your dialogue is a bit awkward eg. "The presence I've felt even back in my hometown" (chapter two) seems unusual colloquial language for a teenage boy.

"Because you're mine" I got the chills. Such a good, good line.

I felt like the kiss was way too sudden. Like there's been no real build-up/anticipation with the relationship and leaves something to be desired.

I also think that Pan is weirdly okay with the sudden situation - and that's not even including the mate with two different guys type thing.
You also need to be careful of not making your male characters too cute/girlish. Admittedly, it's a pet peeve of mine when homosexual relationships are sort of male protector-male damsel in distress.

HOWEVER, I do really like the concept and I think you have good bones to this. It has a lot of potential. You just need to tweak and rework it a bit I think. You seem to really know what you're doing plot-wise and yeah, good luck with it! :)

I'm not quite sure how I found this story, but it's really, really good. Like probably one of the best I've read about anything supernatural here on Mibba. I really do hope you'll update soon, so I can read more. :)

Pleaseee update?
And I love this..I don't really know what else to say. >.<

I don't know how those two guys can stand to share Panlin.

...Panlin is soo adorable!!! :D

I love this>.>

they need to like..idek...but they are so cute.

And...I dunno how I feel about these clans>.>

I wonder why that guy keeps looking at Panlin

Great chapter, as always. Can't wait to read more of this!

I love this story!!! It's sooooo amazing!! But as much as I love Raven and all of his revengefulness...I miss Oriander! Put more of him in this! Plz? :)

If you have them written u update -_-

J'espère vraiment que vous mettez à jour bientôt, même si vous n'obtenez pas un 10/70. J'ai lu l'autre version de cette histoire et je dois dire que vos révisions sont vraiment bien fait et de bon goût. Je ne peux pas attendre de voir ce qui se passe ensuite. Je sais que ce sera bon, car de la façon dont votre écriture s'est améliorée, passant de la copie frist à cette copie. S'il vous plaît jusqu'à la date dès que je puisse en lire plus.

OHMYUGVJUSHDHB.

So..I frikken..adore this story...I've been reading all kinds of stories lately and FINALLY got to this one on my list xD So glad I read it.

PLEASE UPDATE SOON?! :D <333333333333
Frikken love it.

I absolutely love this story, and I can't wait for more of it!

Yes, yes you can.

Hmm I'm excited to see how this turns out.

Really like this story, I'm excited for the next chapter!

Well. This is going to be interesting.
I would how this will work with Oriander (I hope I got his name right) and Raven sharing Panlin.
I can't wait to see where this goes.

I just read both of the versions of this story (so far at least) And I was a little disappointed that you didn't keep all the characters pictures, I really like the other ones besides the Teaching one, I like that one better in this version. All in all, I love your plot.