Let’s Play a Game of Lies; You Tell Me Sweet Lies & I Fall for Them - Comments

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What a great story, and nice detail, but try to make it a bit longer. Didn't really like the first few paragraphs, but it got fairly good. Work on grammar and things like that and make the title shorter. That will help u get reads.

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This story isn't really what I'm used to. I couldn't read past the second chapter, not because your writing is bad, but because that sex scene was terribly graphic and I always feel a bit iffy when reading such explicit stuff like that. It's really just a matter of personal preference. But, based, on the two chapters I did read, your writing is very descriptive and you seem to have a way with words. I like Ace's character, as well. Just thought I should mention that.

I think my only criticism would be that there is a bit too much dialogue occasionally, and the banner is rather crowded, with all of those texts and images. But nevertheless, you are a good writer with an ability to write creatively and create vivid images in the reader's head. I really sounded like a school teacher there, but y'know. Anywhoo, good luck with the rest of the story! c:

wow. i read the first chapter, and i wasn't terribly impressed, but i kept on reading and actually like it! your description/narrative is beautiful; it really sets the scene. the layout makes the words a little hard to read, though.

I just started reading this story and I love Ace! He's hilarious (:
I love your dialogue. It's one of my biggest deal breakers when reading a story. If someone doesn't have good dialogue, it kills the story!

I just started reading this story and I love Ace! He's hillarious (:
I love your dialogue. It's one of my biggest deal breakers when reading a story. If someone doesn't have good dialogue, it kills the story!

I was so sad when Ace died, but I really love this ending. I legit cried through like half of it. I LOVE the things his friends read out of his journal thingy. The one about that guy asking him if he was gay was hilarious. I think you did a great job on this story and I can't wait till the next one :)

i love the quotes and ace's thoughts. i can identify with them so much.
I hope you do a sequel because this story was beyond words.

Is it sad that I'm like balling my eyes out right now? I seriously hope you do a sequel or something because that would make me, and I'm sure a lot of other people, very, very happy :D

I know I'm probably late on this whole I'm gonna comment thing but I found this story yesterday and I loved it! I curse you for making me cry at the end though and I almost never cry, now am here sobbing! :') This was probably one of the best stories I've read :) I'm sad that Ace is gone now... I loved how you did that thing at the end with Lucifer and Ace

O.o I can't believe you just killed him off...

O.o
I can't believe he dies! Does he end up in heaven/hell/limbo?
Update so I can find out!
Please!

I'm so happy this was updated.
Can't wait to find out what happens next!

I love this story!!
Pleeeeease keep updating.

Ummmm wow. That's all I can say. Kinda anxious to see what you do with the rest of the story though :)

I love it <3 This is definitely my favorite story on this site :)

Sorry for not commenting, but I never look at what got updated. I have like probably 100+ emails from mibba about things that were updated that I havent' seen because I don't check.

ANYWHO,
so I saw that this only has 9 subscribers, and I flipped a poop, and so I'm going to put it in the bottom of the chapter to like Tease. or something and get you a bunch of subscribers:D

Ahhhh noooooo! Don't put it on hold! I love the update by the way :)

Thank u polk dot perfection. Didnt think it was to much to ask for but instead Ace is dying TTTTTTT^TTTTTTT

I agree with SuperNovaEcplise.
I want happy!!!!
:)
So wake ace up alive pretty please:)

Sooo. No easy happy ending?..... Poo