The Tattoo - Comments

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I like it so far, and I wanna see where else the story goes.
so, yeah. I can't wait for the next chapter...

Hm... I really like the idea you have for this. It's very unique, and I don't think I've seen an idea like it before.
You're very good with details, which is definitely a plus. One thing I'd like to note though is that maybe you should work them into the story better. Like, instead of stating what color the character's hair is directly, try stating it, like say (for the main character), "My auburn hair fell in front of my eyes." Instead of, "I have long auburn hair," like you did. Like, put it in a moment in the story instead of keeping it directly separate. That's just an example. And just something to think about, really, you don't have to change it if you don't want to.
And as for the layout, it's kind of plain. Which is fine, really, but you may want to do something more with it if you want to attract readers. That's kind of like judging a book by its cover, but really, it does help. You might have been planning to do something with it, but yeah... just wanted to help you out critiquing wise.
Otherwise, this looks good, it really does. :) I can't wait to see where you go with this idea, and I hope you continue! :D
I'm definitely subbing! :)