Hope in the Rain - Comments

We will wait patiently for your return. :)

Chapter Ten

That is heartbreaking — I hope that Gerard does not die — but heroic at the same time, stepping up to save his sister.

Erick and Seth... I'd just love to see them get what's coming to them, hopefully it's death.

Good update, however, and I hope to read more soon.

Chapter Nine

I don't like Erick, or Seth, they're nothing but terrible little weasels. Luckily, King Talon and King Zeke already know the truth about Hope, and they will protect her.

Oh but how I feel for Saria, anything could happen...

I cannot wait to find out what happens next.

Started so amazing yet ended with a terrible twist... What now?

And the plot thickens...

Hi from comment swap :) An interesting story and an original idea! I haven't read all of it yet but I think this story could be quite good. I like your writing style, it reminds me of Celia Rees (author, in case you haven't heard of her :S) for some reason, I think the character Michelle reminded me of a character in one of her books... ANYWAY, I will be interested to read on... My only niggle is the theme is not very complimentary to what I have read so far, and the writing is small and difficult to read. Other than that, I'm impressed.

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I only read the first chapter but your story seems quite interesting. I didn't see and grammatical errors or spelling mistakes, which is always good :) The only thing I really don't like is your theme. The text seems to be quite small on my screen and would make it much easier to read

Hello from comment swap! I read the whole first chapter and your story idea is really great and captivating! I like the intrigue you plant in the mind of the readers by not unveiling everything at the beginning. It's great. There are a few spelling and grammatical errors, but they're not too big of a deal. But I will bring up what the last commenter said, happy regardless, is not a complete thought and should be changed so it reads properly. Maybe, "It kept the villagers inside, huddled around weak fires but happy regardless of the harsh weather." Or something of the sort, so it flows better. :)

Coming at you from the comment swap. I only read the first chapter.
happy regardless. Something about the wording doesn't quite ring right, I don't know why, but perhaps you should consider changing the wording?

I like the story, I'm interested in the plot. The only thing I would have to comment on is that I find the language to be quite difficult. However, that might be because English isn't my first language.

But yes, I quite liked it. I might just give the rest of it a try as well!

Hmmmmm, what's next? Lol

Seth is a dangerous man from the sounds of it, as is Eric. I hope King Talon and Zeke can stop them from doing harm. I look forward to knowing how the king will be with Hope's true identity confession. Good job!!

I was wondering just who was Hope's father, and now I know. I wonder how she'll take the news when she finds out, and I hope she makes a speedy recovery. I am very intrigued to find out just what Seth and Erick have planned, I do not like either of them but I hope it's something to get them both locked up for a good long while.

Good, well-written chapters. Keep up the good work.

Wondering what's going to happen next. :)

I'm really enjoying this story, I hope her leg heals okay

Oh, intrigue.
I was wondering if she'd eventually go back and talk to Zeke, but now it looks like she may very well marry him... I can't wait to see where you take this. Good beginning so far, it's well described but not so described it's boring. I like this very much.

I like this it sounds really cool.
I love the title :)