Sand Dollar - Comments

Love this whole story! I cant wait to see what happens :)

I really hope you update soon! I love all of your stories and the fact that this is a series is even better! You're extremely talented! Keep it up!

UPDATE SOON! I love the storyline so much!!

OMGGG... the tension between Eden and Lauren is so thick, I can feel my stomach churn at the process of this girl's day out backfiring. Also, I am suspicious of the conversation between Carlos and Logan. I feel like everyone is hiding things from each other. All the problems are deeply buried in each of the characters and I cannot wait until it all unleashes.

Get well Hun! Great update!

I've decided I'm going to comment each chapter
So, chapter one...
I oscillated between and "Aww!" pretty much the whole time. There's just this light, almost silly atmosphere and I love it so much. Lighthearted stories are amazing when they're done right, and this is so, so right.
But back to... things xD I honestly had to read the first paragraph a couple times because the switch in tenses threw me off. I mean, it worked once I figured out what was going on, it just took me a while.
Sandbox love held us tight like concrete since that first chance meeting in kindergarten. I really love this line. Best in the whole chapter, I think
I love how easy and real the banter is. Well-written dialogue is a huge weakness of mine when I'm reading, and I love it. Nothing really seemed awkward here.
I know it's just slang, but I stole the bathroom gave me the image of you literally running away with a sink xD I don't know if this is good or bad, you'll have to determine that.
we were falling into the almost stagnant dynamic of an old married couple, - Rocking chairs. They need rocking chairs xD Please?
Overall, I don't have any "criticism" other than the tense shifting at the beginning, but that was probably just me being stupid So yeah, I'm going to read more and comment with my random thoughts and such, and point out anything I find to be awkward. Which, as much as I know about how you write, isn't much. So GO YOU!

Ugh I'm gonna be that annoying reader that gushes over your writing and tells you again and again how amazing it is. Seriously, I can't.

I think it's adorable that Carlos may have a crush on Lauren but I can't help but wonder if that and the fact that she's planning on just messing around will become a problem. I guess time will tell~

I also think you wrote the little sex scene nicely. It wasn't extremely overdone or anything, which was good. I hope you update again soon :)

I love that the friendships between Eden, Lauren, and the boys are beginning to blossom, especially for me as a reader. I did know that Eden worked with the guys on set, but this chapter, I really see more interaction and seriously enjoy them. I find the Kendall/Kandi moment really funny; when Kendall promised to leave dirty dishes for Kandi to clean. Oh gosh, I'm glad you showed an example of why Kandi hates him so much :D
Aww, I thought it's kinda strange that Eden and James are a bit more apart in this chapter than all the others previously. I thought they were dating, but I guess I must have misread the first chapter. Well, it's fine. I wish Lauren the best of luck by rocking as a player!

You may be a little rusty but your writing is seriously flawless. The banter between everyone is great and you're amazing at describing the scenery and whatnot so it's definitely not hard to imagine.

In the end, I thought of Kendall doing a Pauly D impression and I almost died. He definitely needs to do one in real life now lol. Anywho, I can't wait for the next update :)

Oh gosh! Am I the only one who laughed when Logan made Durden get the football? Or at least tried to? Ahaha, I think that's pretty hilarious! God bless Durden for resisting! #Team Durden. Honestly, I really love how he is very included in the story (I like paying attention to little parts of stories). I usually adore your oneshots, and it feels really nice and refreshing to read your full chaptered fics.
Aww, I'm glad that Lauren showed it. It seems that lauren and Carlos have full potential! It is so cute :D

Anyways, the banters between Kandi and Logan are smile-worthy. They are like an old married couple! (I know that K is afraid that they will turn out like that)

Kandi! I'm so glad you decided on a full length story! I saw the update on my Mibba newsfeed section and I immediately gave it a try! Your works always fascinate me! It is nice to see you work on a full-length on your own because I can expect the updates to come consistently!
Anyways, I really love the renovation you've made on this story because I am excited to see what is in store for all of these characters on their Bahama vacation!

Ah, I've been searching for a good BTR fic and I found it! I've read some other things you've written and you're an amazing writer, I'm just saying. I love this so far and I can't wait for more. :)

I am wondering if drama is gong to be n the trip ?

Great so far . Update soon.