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I'm so glad comment swap made me read this story even though this was written years ago. I really wasn't expecting something this good, honestly. So happy I did get something I would have read if I had ever found it. Your writing style is no nice and capturing, I could really learn a thing or two from you. At first, I was a bit confused with the pacing of the story, but as soon as I started the third chapter, I loved it and thought it fit perfectly.

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I actually really like this story, plus the layout is nice and easy on the eyes. Now, I'm not usually much of a You Me At Six fan fiction reader, but I like Josh as a person so I didn't actually mind reading this one. I don't really have any improvements for you because your grammar and spelling is pretty much spot on, and your plot was rather unique :)

I really liked this, your story was well laid out, there were few to no errors with your spelling and grammar. I particularly enjoyed the relationship development between your characters. I'm not a massive YM@6 fan so I was genuinely surprised at how much i enjoyed this story :) slightly dissapointed there won't be a sequel. Would be nice to follow the lives of Hollie and Josh maybe 5/10 years after this story.

I really liked this, your story was well laid out, there were few to no errors with your spelling and grammar. I particularly enjoyed the relationship development between your characters. I'm not a massive YM@6 fan so I was genuinely surprised at how much i enjoyed this story :) slightly dissapointed there won't be a sequel. Would be nice to follow the lives of Hollie and Josh maybe 5/10 years after this story.

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I really love how the main character's relationships developed throughout the story. Your spelling and grammar is fantastic, which is quite refreshing for once! I have never read a You Me At Six fan-fiction before and I'm really glad that this was my first one :) Fabulous job on this story!

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The plot was interesting, you're spelling and grammar is good, overall its not a bad story however its not my type of story, I just couldn't connect to you're characters and I didn't find them that relatable either. But their relationship in interesting to watch it develop however again, thats not really my type of thing to be reading. But ignore me, I'm a little biased as I usually read fantasys and these type of more realistic stories, no mater how good they are, I usually just can't get into the story.

comment swaparroooooo. this is a good story! i think you should write more of it...maybe expand on things. i think i only saw a few errors, but they weren't bad, just looks like you should read through it again. i love how sweet josh is and how understanding he is. The way he notices that she has some underlying issues reveal to me that he really loves her. When I was reading this, I thought of a memoir I read called "The Slave Across the Street." Theresa Flores (who wrote it) was forced to be a sex slave as a teenager and would have to sneak out at night to meet a car, where they would take her to fancy homes and she would be raped repeatedly by men paying her traffickers to do so. In college, she had her first healthy relationship. Mike, his name was, noticed that certain things invoked fright in her. Walking past certain people in the park caused her to cling to her arm more tightly. Theresa was able to spill her past to him, and he just listened. I think that one of the most important things for people is just to have someone listen, and I saw good listening happen in this story. I got diagnosed with depression a year ago, and this past December I got stressed out when I had failed most of my university courses, and I ended up taking a month's worth of my medication and too many painkillers. I went to the doctor's office because I didn't want to die. I just wanted to not be stressed out anymore. The doctor made me call someone to pick me up, so I called my friend and he came and hugged me and talked with me and listened and it made all the difference in the world.

I generally like student/teacher a lot but this is a nice variation on it. You're doing a good job at developing your characters and there are little to no spelling mistakes or grammar errors. I like how you write conversations and dialogues, not too much hassle and well formatted. And it makes sense what they say. Very nice!

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So, I really liked this story. Not just because I'm a huge YMAS fan, but your style of writing is fantastic. Every time there was a little suspense as to what was to happen next, I slightly predicted it. (Love stories all seem to have the same sort of plot line, in my opinion.) Although, the way you wrote everything out was wonderful. I really liked that Josh never took advantage of Hollie and how he was so sweet and wonderful to her, even accepting her past and not being scared of it, nor intimidated. He always seemed to know the right thing to say. Beautiful.<3

Okay so I was really excited to see this was a YMA6 story :) I just saw them recently and became a fan!
Anyways, I really like the pace you're moving at in your story. You don't just reveal everything at once and you take time to round out your characters and give them dimension and I really appreciate things like that. I loved the "meet cute" in the beginning :) it was really cute and I found myself really liking Hollie and Josh the story went on so I think you've done great! keep it up! aND I COPY PASTE THIS JUST TO KNOW IF ITS TRUE . LOL

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Okay so I was really excited to see this was a YMA6 story :) I just saw them recently and became a fan!
Anyways, I really like the pace you're moving at in your story. You don't just reveal everything at once and you take time to round out your characters and give them dimension and I really appreciate things like that. I loved the "meet cute" in the beginning :) it was really cute and I found myself really liking Hollie and Josh the story went on so I think you've done great! keep it up!

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I don't have any problems with this story. I enjoyed reading it, it was well-written and very engaging. I like how you characterized Hollie and Josh is a very cute character. Your descriptions were fantastic, the plot was creative and interesting. This was really amazing.

"Comment Swap" I really enjoy this story. I think It was beautifully written. I love the character Hollie and also the development of the characters in it. You did a lovely job creating an interesting story with depth.

I came here for comment swap, but I can say that without a doubt - this is one of my favourite stories on this site. It was so beautifully written. I only found very few minor grammatical errors, but that's to be expected. This was simply beautiful. That's the only way I can put it.
It was engaging, easy to read and follow. I can quite honestly say that I found nothing wrong with this. Nothing at all. I love how the characters developed throughout the story and the use of English slang made it seem more realistic from a readers point of view.

This was just amazing, you have a real talent for writing! xx

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I really like this story!!! I love when the writer can draw the reader in! I felt like I was a part of the story almost! I don't think I saw any grammar errors, which is a first since actually reading a published book! I always seem to have one or two in my stories so it was cool to see someone who truly has no errors in their first chapter! I enjoyed it!!

COMMENT SWAMP: I love your layout. The colors aren't too overwhelming on the eyes, and the picture is very fitting to the story line. I am a sucker for the student/teacher(tutor) thing. Your use of description is lovely and your dialogue flows nicely. Your writing style is easy to read and this story is just well written which is something I love to stumble upon here on Mibba. The characters are developed throughout the story and I ending up falling in with Hollie and Josh.

Keep writing, lady!

Comment Swap: I'm so very glad that I got your story! Plot line was amazing, and the characters.... Just, yes. I can't even... Anyways, I only caught one or two grammar errors in the entire book, but even they weren't noticeable. I hope you keep writing, because you're fantastic.

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I was brought here through comment swap and I'm so glad, I loved the story and I though it was great. The syle you use it really good and you add a lot of detail into each chapter. It would have been nice if it was longer but still a great read well done :D

Plot:
I was able to get a feel for the plot very early on, which is a good idea. Even in this first chapter, I could tell it was going to be a student/teacher (or in this case tutor) story, which is great because I love those!

Style:
You do a really good writing this story. In the beginning of every chapter, there is really great description and you always do an excellent job setting up the story's scene!

First I got to say I love the layout

Now with your story
I quite enjoyed this story, it was completely amazing. I love how you set this whole thing up and how you ended it. I'm so glad to have read this.

Keep up the good work :)