How It All Started - Comments

Comment swap brought me here and I am really glad! I have always had a bit of an obsession with some of the lesser characters and would have loved to know more about them. These were very well written and a very addictive read. I can't wait to see where you go from here!

YAY! Awesome headcanons :) Hmm, i would comment on all of them individually but that would take way too long, so i'll just say, these are awesome and keep writing and posting! :D

Comment swap brought me here. :) I'm a huge Harry Potter fanatic and reading these made me want to read the books all over again. :D As other comments said, you should really space out your paragraphs. It got confusing for me, so I had to re-read a few times the dialogues. Apart from that, everything is perfect. Good job!

Ok thank you, i will fix that up asap :)

You should not make a paragraph too long and yes, should not continue many dialogues one after the other. It makes the story a bit confusing.

I really like the short glimpses of the harry potter series you gave.

Chapter 2 was quite interesting. It was a new idea to make Harry and Dudely friendly towards each other.

I agree with the comment below about starting a new paragraph for dialogue... It is definitely more difficult to read if dialogue isn't spaced out properly! However, I think the content of this is really good! I'm not a huge Harry Potter fan but it didn't really matter because the plot lines are so original it almost doesn't have to have any relevance to Harry Potter! Minus the magic, obviously! ;) xx

Chapter One- I must say, I've never read anything like this. I really love how you compared McGonagall and Hermione. I never thought of them ever being compared, but the way you did it, it made so much sense. Good job there!

Chapter Two- I think this is going to be my favorite of them all. I never would've imagined Harry, Ginny, and the kids visting the Dursleys. I find it humorous how even the kids aren't into visiting them. One thing you need to do, though, is everytime you start dialogue, start a new paragraph. For example:

"I don't want to go!" exclaimed Lily.

"Why, dad?!" Complained Albus.

And so on. Other than that, these are great! I'm subbing and recommending!

Thank you! Yes, i will be writing more, I usually write at least 3 a week. I just haven't gotten around to updating... but i'll update asap :)

I normally never read stuff like this but comment swap brought me here and I hae to say, these are really good. Will you be posting more? You're a good writer with attention to detail and I love the way to write the characters. I'm a big Harry Potter fan myself :)