OH MY GOSH MY LOOOOOVE. I came back to check after a loooong time of nonactivity and what do I find but another precious gem still in the opening stages that was first posted more than HALF A YEAR AGO?
So, first I want to say that you left Raperian's name as Shapiro in the second paragraph of the summary and also there are a few minor typos in the first chapter. Like, toward the bottom you accidentally used if for of and things like that. Not too confusing or anything, but yeah.
Now, I love the start of this. It's perfectly intriguing, deliciously vague, but also a tad bit confusing in the second chapter. I'm not exactly sure what you're getting at. Was that the first time he tried to help, which made him want to help more, and did him helping the boy in the first chapter come after his attempt to help the girl...or what? I'm a little confused as to which comes first and what on earth made him want to help her instead of continuing to revel in the fear of the dreams...
Anyway, love this so far. I hope you get on sometime and post more! I've missed your writing. :)
Oh my gosh! This is sooo amazing! I love this whole idea, very unique. I wouldn't like to be Shapiro. I hate nightmares (doubt anyone likes them, but you get what I mean). :) Can't wait to read more! :DD P.S. Yay! First comment! :)
So, first I want to say that you left Raperian's name as Shapiro in the second paragraph of the summary and also there are a few minor typos in the first chapter. Like, toward the bottom you accidentally used if for of and things like that. Not too confusing or anything, but yeah.
Now, I love the start of this. It's perfectly intriguing, deliciously vague, but also a tad bit confusing in the second chapter. I'm not exactly sure what you're getting at. Was that the first time he tried to help, which made him want to help more, and did him helping the boy in the first chapter come after his attempt to help the girl...or what? I'm a little confused as to which comes first and what on earth made him want to help her instead of continuing to revel in the fear of the dreams...
Anyway, love this so far. I hope you get on sometime and post more! I've missed your writing. :)