If You Are Reading This, I Am Dead. - Comments

Ooh, I can't wait to read what happens next! :)

You'll have to stay tuned to find out what his girlfriend knows or doesn't know.

well with updates like that how couldn't i keep reading? (:
Only a few things to fix maybe, like when they're on the bed it'd me Max and my weight, not I's >,<
and then you switched a right with write.

But besides that, that was great. I really liked it, although the end did confuse me a little bit.
Does his girlfriend know about any of this...?
Update soon :D

I'm glad that you enjoyed it. Normally I'd go a ton more depth into feelings... I just need to get back into my groove of writing again, ehh?
There's a chance I'll update today, although it is more likely to be tomorrow due to the fact that I might want to write a few chapters, then plan this out more. The chapters should get longer as they go, and much, much deeper.
I'd suggest reading some of "Twenty-One Wilted Roses", my completed short story collection. Some of those, I've been told, are pretty in depth. Anyways, thanks for reading, and I hope you continue to enjoy :)

Oh my gooses; that was absolutely fantastically amazing :D
It's so powerful and a crazy great idea for the story.

If I were to give you any suggestions, maybe go a little more in depth as to
what everyone's feeling...
It's really great though !

hurry and update kay? I refuse to wait 2 years for an update.

Mucho thankss :)

Update on the way today!

I have about a million different ideas of things that can happen in this story...It's so good! It's practically killing me not knowing what will happen...Pwease update soon! :]

That was....I don't know. Awesome. Amazing. Addicting. Take your pick. I can't wait for the next chapter.

grr the smileys wont work..
anyway meh likeh thingeh! lol

Thanks a bunch TwinSouls. You have a sharp eye :)

I found those errors and changed them straight away. Maybe you should be my editor ;D

Very good start. The language is wonderful, and you describe everything very well. The only thing I can suggest is to watch out for little mistakes. For example, I saw "there" when it was supposed to be "their", and "here" when it was supposed to be "her". The second is a more common mistake, one that I make sometimes too. Just remember to re-read and edit carefully. Other than that, great start, and I'll be looking out for your second chapter.

Awesome. Seriously its kwlll

Hehe thanks :)

Wow...I'm already totally hooked! More soon pretty pretty pwease...

Thanks so much :) Yes, I do plan on updating later today in fact....

Hello ^.^ I just wanted to say that I was caught by your description, this was a good beginning, I cant wait to read more. Please update soon ^.^