@ Linked I'll admit and agree that the first few chapters were very amateur. I appreciate the constructive criticism because that just betters the story and the writer so thanks.
From reading the first two-chapters, you have absolutely no world building and the characters are completely one dimensional. Remember to set a scene - describe where they are, what they’re doing and why they’re doing it, how they feel, who they are. You’re relying way too much on dialogue, which makes your characters come across as robotic. I also feel like you’re rushing each scene…There was basically 50 words between when the story began and when the catalyst of your story happened. Anyway, all the best.
Chapter 139 is by far my favorite chapter! I laughed so hard throughout the whole chapter. Like, crying-laughing!! Selena actually having the nerve to suggest and even offer to "help" him break things off with Chrissy was so amusing. And when she said "I know you feel the same way, too" i was like "Oh, you don't know nothing, honey. Move along." But seriously, Brittney. Amazing job on this story. Can't wait for more!! :)