From Teammates to Best Friends to Boyfriends? - Comments

Finally got some time to read this and awww its just so cute :) they're so adorable together :D

Oh my gosh the ending was just so cute

Awwwwwwwwwwwwww HOW CUTE!!!!!

This story is so great! I love love love love it!!!!!(:

Need an update!

They are to cute together. You are doing awesome with this story keep it up!!

but i will say, your story definitely improves tremendously as it continues on. Going back to the first few chapters and giving them a decent edit or so wouldn't hurt you? I know I had to do that on one of my storie's because I matured as I was writing it, and the beginning was sloppy so maybe consider editing that summary and those first few weak chapters and it'll help you a lot with readers anf "Fans" so to speak!

thanks!

Your title is a bit obvious... It gives me no mystery as to what the plot is going to be and so I'm left with no surprises. Perhaps that's why I'm so bored with what I've just read. Your summary is also way too long and just gives off the impression that you aren't very skillfull in your writing, which you are not.

Do not take this offesively, but more constructively. Your sentences are very sloppy and lack depth, description and emotion. I feel as if I do not know your characters at all, nor do I know the relationship between your characters. Nothing connects right and I just feel as if the story is...empty, in a way. There's a sort of hollowness to it and rather than feeling a part of the story in a way that I can be emotionally attatched to it, I feel detached and like I'm reading something I'm not supposed to. Like I don't belong, so I only get the vague description of things.

If your willing to take my suggestions, I'd suggest you read other stories and pick out what you like and you don't like. Then, you can take the things that you do like and learn how to incorporate them into your story so that you are able to grow, learn and mature in your writing. Not to ruin your day but rather to help you improve and grow as an author!

If you have any other questions on anything, let me know and I'd be soo willing to try and help best I can.

Happy writing!

:)

story is amazing and i think they should help the exchange student get with the guy that he likes and it should be one of their old buddies, like Liam turns gay for him or something.

Update pleassssseeee!!

Yay sexy makeout timee!

MORE PLEASE! xD

Please have them come out to everyone soon.

This story is so good! (: more please? haha

I MUST HAVE MORE.

You did awesome. I loved it like always and am stoked to read about the after math of it all.

5 shots of vodka will not get you buzzed it'll totally get you flat out drunk. XD
But I'm glad they kissed in public. (:

Oh and just have them do their "coming out" kiss so they dont seem to take it to fast.

Oh and just have them do their "coming out" kiss so they dont seem to take it to fast.

I love how you put a real sex talk in it, ive never seen anyone else do that. Oh and i loved it like always.