Anamnesis - Comments

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SHE REMEMBERS. OMG SHE FREAKING REMEMBERS. but now there's probably gonna be trouble because she was hugging her brother and OF FREAKING COURSE you left another cliffhanger hahaha you jerk! Loved this!

LAME CLIFFHANGERS ARE LAME. But also fantastic and necessary and so frustrating that I'm telling you, right now, I need you to update this soon. This chapter was so vivid and intense. I need to know what happens!!

...how the crap is this story halfway finished?! I love every chapter, every amazing one line, every bit of it! AND I DON'T WANT IT TO END EVER

This story is sooo good! The writing is very well done and it grips you. I was really hoping for a next chapter I was so into this story, I was sad when there wasn't one. I totally can feel Dees pain as well. I try to imagine what it would be like to not be able to remember anything, not even your own name, and it makes me very sympathetic to her. I hope you update more and keep up the good work!

Damnit, I was hoping for at least one more chapter. I usually do my comments as I read, but I didn't want to stop reading long enough to write them. This is extremely freaking intriguing. I like the layout. And I was a little iffy with the summary, but I love anything to do with memory loss, so I decided to take a peek at the first chapter. And then I couldn't stop.

I'm so curious as to what is going on. What's in her stomach? Who was the green-eyed girl? Who's the brown-eyed man? What do they have to do with anything? Why are these doctors treating her like this? Why is she not allowed to keep her memory? What is going on?!?!

I like how her thoughts are fuzzy and come in little spurts that evaporate. This makes me think of my Psychology class lol

A well-written piece , I must say. Totally subbing because I want more written soon. So write! Please?

i like it and i hope you decide to write more of it

YES! This layout is a good balance of dark and light, though I usually am against light text/dark backgrounds. It very much brings forth the mentioned idea of a wall of fog. Somehow including the definition intrigues me - I wonder how it will tie to the story; and the fact that there is little information revealed about the main character does well to catch my attention.


Immediately this has me reminiscent of Stitchers, a sci-fi show on ABC Family/Freeform. This sort of thing interests me, and I'm excited to see what 83067 can do. "He would be attractive; if I remembered what attractive was." That's an odd concept - she knows and yet doesn't. There's something I can't quite bring to the front of my mind about this development; even without developing her personality much in this chapter, you've set this up so readers can make judgments. Like a puzzle.

There are a few places where punctuation can be improved, but the plot content is still solid.


Using sort of clipped sentences to help along that she doesn't remember things is beginning to aid me in developing a voice for her in my mind. Not quite robotic, but not normal; a voice with a hint of confusion and skepticism. This is something I haven't experienced through writing in a long time and a skill that's amazing to have. Well done. Having someone open you up and stick hands inside doesn't seem pleasant, and you convey that nicely. I'm not into gore, but the mystique of this is just too great to turn away from.


This story is something else. Bits and pieces of all the dystopian novels and films I enjoy float into my mind to help me visualize this. This is the story I've been looking for. It's everything I never knew I needed. I can't hellp but wonder if these chapters are mixed up chronologically, and what the significance is. Everything seems so fragmented, and that adds to the allure.

I can hear the pulse in my ears as it whisper quiet thuds that bring me to a sense of calm. - whispers?


I wasn't expecting things to pick up as fast as they have. Especially not in a positive way. The doctor with the brown hair seems wonderful. Him calling her Dee makes it obvious that he knows things, that he's important. The fact that he's trying to fix her memory instead of destroy it calls to question his character, his motives. Sometimes the nicest people are the most devious and I wonder if he will eventually turn against her.

Overall, you've done brilliant so far! This is unlike anything I've read on Mibba, and is extremely unique. I want more. I can't wait. You've definitely got me subscribing

I do not know what is happening but I do know that I will remember this.

Probably one of the most important lines, to me. I can't even say why but it sticks.

There honestly aren't enough words or ways to tell you how much I love this story and your writing. The way that you give a little bit but still keep us all guessing and hooked is pure genius. Whatever this is turning out to be, I love it and need more!

THIS.

THISTHISTHIS.

I was terrified for this poor girl. Seriously, what the ever loving heck were they doing to her? And who is Brayden? Where are they? What is going on? I NEED MORE. I LOVE THIS. And I love the layout almost as much, like dayum girl!

Oh my god please continue this. This is golden. I agree with Rocket Queen about it being super unique to anything on this site. I want to know what the hell is going on and what kind of place this is. Like what the hell are they doing to this poor girl. Who was she before? How did she get here? Who's Braydon to her? TELL ME ALL THE THINGS PLEASE BEFORE I LOSE MY SHIT. just give it to me dammit. GIVE IT ALL TO ME. In all honesty though this has the potential to be something addictive and I don't really read much on Mibba. There were very few spelling errors scattered throughout your first and last chapter but nothing super distracting. A quick comb through could fix those up in a jiffy.

Definitely will be subscribing.

Wow this is such an awesome story! And very unique to this site. I am most definitely intrigued to know what happens next, and I hope you plan on making this a chaptered story. Some parts of the story such as Dee not remembering her name or things about the day before, and also the phrases the doctors use when they speak to her remind me a little of the TV show Dollhouse. Have you seen it or were you perhaps inspired by it when you wrote this?

Either way, it's amazing. The description and attention to detail is great. The only minor flaw I noticed was a spelling error where you used the word 'manor' when it should actually be 'manner'. Aside from that, the grammar and spelling was absolutely perfect, and the chapter flowed so smoothly.

I'm definitely subbing. :)

Oh gosh, I'm so intrigued!
This was so unique and original, and I loved the way it was written :)

If you write more that would be immense and I will stalk this story ha.
but if you don't, I'm just glad you finally wrote this down and posted it!

Oh my gosh, woman, what is this?! It's amazing, that's what it is! I don't even know what to say. I want to know what happens next. I want to know what's going on, period! This can not be just a oneshot. Please, please, please continue this! <333

Well, it better have more than one chapter! You can't leave me hanging like that! This wonderful! I'm excited to see where you take it, if you decided to continue. :) <222