Rain In The Summertime - Comments

You said hurt twice within two paragraphs. It may sound superficial but it's really obvious when you read it. I saw now at one point in the story however I cannot find it. I saw it in another story too, so it might have just been a mixed up thought in my head. Your story is amazing though and I'm glad that you appreciate my comment; I did not intend to insult you in any way.

If the writing is in past tense you shouldn't use the word "now". Also you should use a more vivid vocabulary. I feel as if you were using the word "hurt" too often. Good story overall!

I love this so much. The BEST Zacky one shot I EVER read.
Amazing job : )