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Team Adam ftw!

TEAM ADAM!!! Lol.

Short sad cute little chapter.

Ugh. I LOVE IT!!!! :)

her mother needed to be told that.. her continuing doing this will just make it worse and somewhere deep down I think she knows it too.. hmm.. so her and Adam are on the road to being something.. hmm.. I wonder how this whole hospital/mom thing will go for them... hmm.. good chapter

I love it! You should totally make a character page! :)

Hmm.. I'm thinking yes on the character page thing... Hmm.. So they are together now? Or well sort of... I wonder how this conversation with her mother will be like. I don't know if either of them will be happy tonight. But then again what do I know? Good chapter.

oh god that is not going to be a fun convo!! And yes make a characters page!!! Love u!! <3

No worries about update speed. So they are up in the air right about now and her mother is busy with someone.. Just damn.. Good chapter.

Oh god. The suspense! I love it! Can't wait for the next chapter! <3

Wow...that really sucks... :'(
Love you!! Update soon!!
And happy day late birthday!!1 (again)

Wow.. One day.. He bounces back faster than I thought possible. I kind of hope it's not what it looks like. But it probably is... Hmmm.. Poor girl.. I hope things work out for her in the rain. Good chapter.

I like the first diary entry a lot. Though there were some grammatical issues, I feel like they're not really a problem there because this was written by a thirteen-year-old. In written character, it makes sense!

After the entry ends, however, I'd like to point out that you switch tenses a lot. Be careful of that - you say 'had' in one sentence and then 'have' in the next.

I like the description and the idea here - original and interesting. :) There are some grammatical issues (mixing they're for their, etc) in the non-diary section that need to be addressed, but overall this was good. I like it.

I love it! :)

Wow, he actually admitted it. Didn't think he would honestly. I thought he would try and just get her to talk to him again. But what do I know about that anyways? I'm still learning his character and you as an author already know it. I wonder what she's going to say to him and if she'll do it before the hidden time limit is passed. Yes I did think there is one xD other than that there were some typos, but it doesn't destract from the story. Good chapter and I'm looking forward to more.

Yay! Details!

Well done on the chapter. I'm waiting patiently for the next one. =)

Wow, this is not going to turn out well... I think. Good chapter and I can't wait for more ^.^

Okay.. Well I love it!!! I've said that already but still.. You're an AMAZING writer. So keep it up. <3 you! :)

I like this story. I really do. The premise is very good and not something that most people write about.

But.... there are a few things that are bugging me. Details! I want more details. Like how do some of the people look? What does their house look like? There are a few spelling errors as well, like you forgot to add the last letter on some words or put a 'm' instead of a 'n'.

I don't know, but I also feel like this story is a bit rushed. It might just be me though.

Besides that, I like it. Keep up with the good work. =D
(I hope this doesn't come off as too mean. I'm not trying to be, but I just want to help you grow as a writer.)

I love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!