We're Destined To Explode - Comments

@ DaisyBelladonna
Thank you for your input and I will check out your story.

Also, I was directed here from comment swap, so If you could check out my story, I would much appreciate it.

I see good potential with this story. I recommend using a little more detail and less conversations between characters. Not that it is a bad thing, it just gets a little confusing at the beginning of stories to be tossed into a situation for the first time. Also, it would be a lot easier to read if the font was bigger, but that's just a personal preference:) I do see a good story in the making though.