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  • i.refuse.2.sink

    i.refuse.2.sink (150)

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    @ DaisyBelladonna
    Thank you for your input and I will check out your story. Smile
    June 20th, 2013 at 05:55am
  • Dahlia Belladonna

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    Also, I was directed here from comment swap, so If you could check out my story, I would much appreciate it.
    June 20th, 2013 at 05:32am
  • Dahlia Belladonna

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    I see good potential with this story. I recommend using a little more detail and less conversations between characters. Not that it is a bad thing, it just gets a little confusing at the beginning of stories to be tossed into a situation for the first time. Also, it would be a lot easier to read if the font was bigger, but that's just a personal preference:) I do see a good story in the making though.
    June 20th, 2013 at 05:31am
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