January 23rd, 2013 at 03:59am
Ok, this is ridiculous. Your babies aren't even homo sapiens. They have to be some new species. Ch. 15 and 16 aren't possible. A baby cannot kick through the amniotic sac; it's not that fragile. THey do not make multiple incisions to get babies out, even twins. If it's an emergency, the incision is longer and may be t shaped but they don't make multiple openings. Babies at 6 months gestation are barely viable at all outside the womb, many still die. Most will need a minimum of 3 months in incubators with all sorts of medical assistance. Most will be in the hospital 6 months or more. Some aren't even a pound at that point. There's no way a baby, even a full term infant, gains a pound in 3 days. I'm pretty sure the only way a premie under 30 weeks gestation leaves the hospital after 2 weeks is if it's dead.
I'm sorry, but this isn't even vaguely believable. Girl meets rockstar, fine, whatever. But you've not made any effort to get the facts vaguely right on something where information is so easily available. Your pregnancy is pure fiction and not in a good way.
It's fiction. I'm a barista not an author. the whole point of it is to be a fantastical and fictional romance. I know most of it isn't right. If you don't have something nice to say please don't say anything at all.