Permanence - Comments

This was an interesting story. It took me a couple tries to get into it but I'm glad I gave it a second chance. the story left be wondering if Heather would try to break them up. She seems like an interesting character. Do you plan on updating in the future? I would love to see what happens with Heather.

So I love this story. You're a wonderful writer :) I was hoping Heather would get bitch slapped, but maybe next time haha.

Off to read more of your work.

That was quite fabulous; update soon! xx

Ughhhh I was so excited to see this was updated!

I'm so glad to see you updated this! This one was a hell of a chapter ;) Update soon!

I read all the chapters right away :) Heather is pissing me off though. She needs to get over herself. I mean he's married. I can't believe she would hold a grudge for two years, but hey it makes for a dramatic story line. I know Delany loves him, but I just have a feeeling that he's going to do something stupid to screw it up. Anyway, good job so far. Keep writing :)

Relly good story so far.. only 2 chapters n alreddy I luv it... update soon! :)

I like this. It's different and well written, and it's not easy to find many good Matt stories on here. Props, update soon :)

Just read this. I really like it. It's very unique and very original. And I must say that you have me hooked on this. I feel sorry for the girl, and her not thinking marriage was what it was cut out to be. That was very sad. But I do like this story, and I can’t wait for more. It’s really neat and all. I am defiantly recommending this story to everyone, because it’s awesome!!!

There's only two chapters so far and I'm completely hooked! I really love the way you sort of bounce back and forth between the past and the present. It really gives the readers a sense of who the characters are.

I also loved the way you've portrayed the characters thus far. With Heather, it's just so easy to tell that she could quite possibly be the cause of serious trouble somewhere down the road, based on her past with Laney. I can't wait to see how Laney/Matty's relationship develops now that they're officially married.

Great job!

I absolutely adore your summary. The last line actually made me giggle so, props for that! I also really love the way you've taken the time to explain things about the band and who they are because I'm reading this as a totally objective viewer—to me, this could be original fiction because I've never heard of the band. Heather's character is very nice. I like how she has the obvious flaw of behaving a bit sluttishly, but is still portrayed as a human being with feelings and interests beyond the bedroom. I really hope the two of them can make up, and remain friends throughout this story. So much slut shame goes on in stories, and this is a nice change. I also adore how long your chapters are. They're properly padded, and give the reader something to look forward to each time. Your grammar seems to be spot on for the most part, and I didn't notice any glaring spelling mistakes either.

My only real critique would be the timetable. To me at least, it seems the whole falling in love bit happened really fast. She went from caring too much about her friend's opinions to picking him and fighting Heather a bit too quickly for my tastes. A little more build up might have served well to help the reader better understand all the emotions that went into her decisions. I generally think romances read best when the first three, sometimes even four, chapters are spent building up to the characters' decision to be together unless their relationship is already established at the beginning. More time might make her fight with Heather seem more mature, and less founded in irrational, young hormones.

All in all, I thought it was a really good read. Three and half out of five stars, and that's coming from someone who isn't a part of this fandom. I would definitely be interested in reading more! So yea, hats off to you! This story was positively delightful, a real treat. ^.^

I love this story already!! Update soon:) I also think that he's not going to Oli's..mhmm

This is great! I feel like Matty's not really going to Oli's, but maybe I'm just paranoid. Hahaa. I can't wait for the next update! :)

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Lucky, my first two chapters of a new story got deleted and like a genius I never saved a second copy -_- This is wonderful, though, I'm really excited for the next chapter. It's kinda refreshing to read from an author with proper grammar and adequate word choice too ;p Keep it up, I'm definitely interested!

I really like this :)