Just got this story through the comment swap. I like that you have mentioned the conflict she has with Ronnie and Craig, I can sense drama! I'm looking forward to seeing her relationship with monte grow also. I just wish there was more back story about them as a couple (: The only critism I had was the blue in the layout, it was a little hard to read but not bad. Keep going!
Hey, i just read your story and i have to say i really liked it. It was something fresh and new and i really enjoyed reading it, you have clearly planned every character and chapter and it really shows and gives your story a better flow than making it up on the spot. I really loved it!
The only critism I had was the blue in the layout, it was a little hard to read but not bad. Keep going!