November 12th, 2012 at 01:34am
Can I just say before I start, that this is awesome! I love the concept and I really can not wait to see where you take this. *subscribes*
From the summary, you’ve literally sucked me into the world you’re creating. The layout is simple and it’s easy on the eyes, so that is major brownie points for you.
Chapter One definitely gets the adrenaline rushing. From the first few paragraphs, you’ve set the scene perfectly. Giving the readers (and me. Heh.) the sense of danger.
Chapter Two is slow paced after the first chapter, but I liked that. It’s giving an insight of her life and family outside of I guess the ’killing’ business.
The only criticism I do have is punctuation. In some of your sentences, there aren’t many commas and such present. It ruins your writing flow and no author wants that.
Over all, I really liked this. Keep going! I can’t wait for this to continue!
One love,
Keeta.
This story is different. Deffinitly not like the stories I normally. I'm very fascinated, and find this very interesting. I don't know who I think about her mother however. I'm not liking her. I really don't like parents like her.
Her job however seems very interesting. Well, other then the fact that she could have died in the first chapter.
I like your writing style. The plot is very interesting and different, and I really like this. I hope you update soon, because I would like to read some more.