Hell's Hold - Comments

Loved zee update! Great job with it.
Hm... I liked seeing that different side of Amber. Dean actually had some power over her. :P
But... where's Sam? I hope he's alright. :o But now the werewolf is hunting them. This is getting intense.
Can't wait for more! :D

Oh man oh man oh man! Werewolves? I like it! It's a world not explored deeply by the show, so you can do a lot with it. I can't wait to see what happens next. Will Castiel be in the story at all?

I loved the update.

Question, is this before or after their dad dies and Sam gets out of the cage with Lucifer?

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Loved the update!
Ooh... it's already starting to get suspenseful! :o
And to add the image divider thing... lol. Well first, you need a small image. If you already have that, you need to get a url for it. I usually just upload my photos onto Tinypic.com, since you don't need an account and can do it for free. From there, take the link that has [IMG] [/IMG] around it, or if you're using a different site, make sure once you place the link to the photo in your story, you put [IMG] [/IMG] around it, and that should work. Your image should pop up to divide sections of the story. :)
If that doesn't work, let me know. But hopefully I was of help. :D

more please?

I've never watched Supernatural, but all the same, I have few compliments and suggestions to hand out. Your grammar and spelling was fine. If there were a few mistakes scattered hereabout then I overlooked them. The summary was engaging, but I am quite confused as to how it fits with the rest of the story. Also, I think you need to consider googling the Mary Sue Litmus Test, and giving that a try because your character seems to be at best toeing the line. The story has several interesting, creepy elements that give it a nice boost. It's readable, but needs a little polishing.

I don't really know much about the Supernatural (I've only seen it about 2 times), but this story is really good and you write so well! Please update soon! :)

I strongly don't agree with being a silent reader.
BTW, be cautious that your OC is a Mary-Sue.

Ah... okay. So this is slowly starting to make sense. Aha. :P
Great job with the new update! Hm... so that's how they know Amber. Or know of her, anyway, since they didn't exactly meet ideally. lol.
Hm... I wonder how the teaming up deal will go? Will Sam and Dean agree to it? It seems there's already some tension between Amber and Dean.
Loved the update! Can't wait fore more! Sorry for the delay in commenting! :o

Supernatural <3 :D You've written Dean seriously well, I can just hear and picture him doing all that, it sticks with the original character of him so well, you captured him perfectly. Plus, the way him and Sam interact, I love that relationship and again, you've captured it perfectly. I also really liked how you introduced Amber and the flashback to how they met her. The tornado and demon idea was really good, and sounded seriously creepy! I'm subscribing, really looking forward to seeing more interaction between Dean and Amber :D

So I'm not really familiar with Supernatual and all that, but you made it really easy to understand what they do and everything, which is good. The layout was really nice, too, and so was the dialogue. I especially like what you said about the coffee, how the steam curled up until it was invisible with the ceiling, something like that. That was good, and I could picture it.
Very interesting. I like Amber's character, she seems like a badass :)

Not sure how I feel about Amber, just because I have this eternal love for Dean, but as far as the story itself, I love it. I can't wait to see how it turns out.

This is nice story. The thing I like most about it is that you can tell that it's for the Supernatural world. There's a tone akin to that in the actual show. Nice job, love.

This is a really good story. The details are pretty good. There seems to be a lot of dialogue, but I really enjoyed reading it. You have some minor errors, but it doesn't take away from the story.

I loved this chapter, and this story so far. It's very good.

Loved the update! :)
Hm... so I wasn't expecting them to already know her. Or well, Sam, anyway, right? He was the one that said her name at the end? Or was that Dean? XD
I figured they would just meet her. Though I guess with what Backsplash said... the summary kind of made me think that. And then what you put in the summary... the story would eventually lead to that. I didn't think one of them would already know her.
Anyway, great job with the update! :D Aha, you have Dean and Sam's characters down pretty well.
And there's a little confusion, but really, I'm sure as you keep going with the story things will clear up. :) So you don't have to explain if you feel that as you keep going... it'll clarify.
Can't wait for more! :D

I've never seen Supernatural, if this is what that's based on. xD

Anyway, the summary is sort of nice, but then again, the little scene doesn't feel really like a summary. I'd have loved that as a prologue of sorts instead, and with a more proper actual summary. The text is also insanely small, and I'm clicking "custom layout" I'm afraid. And there's a massive space between the banner and the story which I don't really get. :/

“Cream and sugar?” it was evident she wanted to hang around;
- Since it's a new sentence, "it" should be capitalized.

“I can’t help, but notice your trails,” shifting her weight she eyed
- Same with this sentence, "shifting" needs to be capitalized.

I do like the way you've written the intro though, it sort of gives away a bit, but still keeps the plot a little mysterious. I like it.

I love the comment Sammy made about Dean wanting to make love to the chopper haha :3
I think you've definitely captured their whole brotherly love thing pretty well - y'know, how they tease each other but still have each other's backs.