Alice of Human Sacrifice - Comments

I think this story is based off this video: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=j6MltGHO-lE

I wanted to do this but... I see that I can't do it because you have already done it... But it's alright! :')

Ahhh! Alice of Human Sacrifice!!!! <3 I love you for doing this!

I really really like the summary. The personification of the dream is great and works very well as a hook.

It was a beautiful sight, but sadly, there were no life it fill it. Do you mean, "It was a beautiful sight, but sadly, there was no life to fill it."?

With every step, her hands became redder with the blood of the innocent. I really like this line. I think this particular description is gory but also somewhat beautiful.

Through the first and second chapters, I can see that this story is definitely creepy and mysterious, but in a totally good way. I'm really liking this idea you have going here, and the way you describe everything is fantastic, too; I like your word choices. Keep it up!

Not sure what this is, but its certainly interesting.

The first chpater was creepy and wonderful at the same time. It made me want to click on the second chapter as soon as possible, so when my computer froze I wasn't happy. lol!
The second chapter was so perfect and full of detail that I just didn't want it to end, but of course all good things come to an end and you didn't post the next chapter so now I am writing this asking you too update soon :)

First off, I really liked your summary. The picture too, they caught my attention quickly. Also, I like your writing style. Your descriptions really fit the gory style you were going for, and the imagery was really nicely written. I’m afraid I don’t remember much about the wonderland universe, but it’s interesting to read about! :)