Seems An Awful Waste - Comments

u asked me yesterday 4 a comment - and dam girl u reli can write
i've experienced tht in our story ;) *lovingly blushes*
keep up the good work baby
love u xxxx
Travis xx

Hey sabrina like the story its quite sad atm hope it has a happy ending - u should do this sorta ling more often ly xxxx

Love the update =D

Hey
I'm a new reader :]
I love the story.
I'm going to subscribe.
I hope you don't mind, but i would like to give you some
Positive Praise(PP):
I love the descriptive language.
I see your ideas building up.
I love the idea of the story.
The idea is unique but also gripping the reader.

Constructive Crticism (CC):
Try and extend you sentences.
Use a variety of punctuation. Maybe consider using the Punctuation Pyramid?
Paragraph more.
Make the chapters longer and maybe add in cliffhangers.
Get us all interested!!

You don't have to use my advice, but if you were stuck on anything; there are some of my ideas. :]
Apart from that, an amazing piece on the whole. I am going to subscribe and see how things go.
If you ever need anything, message me on my Proifle or anywhere at anytime and I will get to you as soon as possible.
Thanks :]
Signed,
Mrs.Gee Way^^ xxx (Sarah/Saz)