The Summer of Summers - Comments

I know this is old as heck, but I just found your story now and :O Wow, I love the synopsis and first chapter (that's what I'm on right now) so much!!! AAAAHHHH IT HAS ME SO EXCITED AND PUMPED I DON'T KNOW WHY BUT THE ATMOSPHERE IS PERFECT!!!

Yay, you updated this! Loved the second update! :D
Hm... so we're getting an introduction to more characters now. Georgia... I like that for a name. You don't see that too often.
Great job! Can't wait for more! :D

I like this so far! The layout is pretty and its not too busy or crazy, which is really nice. I love super short summaries, so kudos to you on that one! The first chapter is really good. It is interesting and it drew me in enough that I wanted to continue to the second chapter while it also left just enough mystery. Again,chapter two was god and I have no complaints. Good luck with the rest!

I'll admit I'm not the biggest fan of the title, it falls sort of flat with me, but I really love the simplicity of the summary and the layout because it gives just the right touch and I can already get a taste for what it's about only in one sentence. Plus I'm a sucker for a good summer romance, haha. But I think burning sun and skin burns is sort of redundant, maybe pick a better word like scorching sun or something? :3

I love the vocabulary you use that doesn't weigh down the words but spruces it up nicely, and just makes it a lot more poetic and beautiful without trying too hard like some people do, it's a really lovely balance. Like how it bit at her knees and the lazy waves and the wind playing with her hair, smalls things like that really make me fall in love.

It's a cute non-conventional meeting, with that air of mystery that makes me want to see Beach Boy again (Dan?) Mostly because when people stare out at the ocean they have something important to think about which means drama in the future and I'm a total drama junkie. But it's very realistic, and not like "oh my god so hot need to plan the rest of my life with him" like so many other stories, it's very refreshing to read this! c:

The wind hitting her face and a smile spreading across her face is a little redundant in one sentence. I'm a little confused about the chronology of the story but overall I like it, it's simplistic and nice to read, the sentence structure gets a little choppy sometimes but nothing huge. And I really like Marla, she seems like a good time. :3

Overall, it's great beginning!

You have a great way with describing details. Every scene is so easily played out in my mind. I was also instantly drawn in by your summary.

One minor grammar thing that caught my eye: "there's a bomb fire at North Edge tonight". I'm assuming you meant a bonfire. (:

Anywho, it gives way to turn out to be the perfect summer story. I'm not too keen on the name though; however, I don't have a good suggestion for another one. :/ It is fine, but it wouldn't be one that would catch my attention, even though the content of your story does! Consider me subscribed!

I love the verb tense you write in. Most stories are written in past tense, because it's so much easier to write in, but only a handful of good writers can switch that up and keep it constant throughout the entire story, good job. I really like your summary, and the first chapter. I'm excited to read more.

I love this already. I can't wait to read more!! :)

Ooh... I'm excited for this! :D
One thing to point out:
'When had gotten to my front door I looked back to see if he was still there.'
I believe there should be an 'I' added after 'When'. :)
Other than that, you're golden.
Can't wait to see what all you have in store!
Definitely... subscribed! :D