Wow. Good writing. I like the way you ended the second cha[ter. It made me go onto the third. The layout and background pictures are great and I love how they allude to the story. Your writing is great and descriptive. I can imagine everything thats going on. Honestly, I don't know anything bad that I could say. It is weird that she has the feeling something would happen. I imagine most people would be comepletly clueless about their death. And also, if she was on edge all day, why would she go into a strangers house? Wouldn't she be a little more cautious? But anyhow, over all, I loved it. Totally suscribing :)
July 4th, 2012 at 07:56am