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  • vintageharlequins

    vintageharlequins (100)

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    So, I was right, I did quite like it. The imagery was good, very doom and gloom. Your paragraphing needs a little work. Not a lot, it could just be spaced a little differently. And the grammar where the dialogue bits are concerned, too. I can show you, if you want. Just PM me =]
    May 4th, 2012 at 04:22am
  • FoolWithDreamss

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    Love it, I want more!! c:
    May 3rd, 2012 at 07:22pm
  • thenastyloveblog

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    Ok, thank you, I'm working on chapter two at the moment :) hopefully it won't take to long ^^
    May 3rd, 2012 at 05:41pm
  • stallion duck.

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    Okay, you have me interested. You just can't leave me hanging now.
    What's wrong with them? I'm nervous. :/
    May 3rd, 2012 at 05:22pm
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